I want to sit beside you every night
To swing away the evening filled with joy
And hold your hand and kiss you tenderly
Why did we have to argue and to fight
Instead of playing like a girl and boy
We had to spoil it all and try to score
If you were here I'd pull you close to me
And whisper that I'd always treat you right
Before I told you what I should enjoy
Forgiveness from your lips would set me free
So we could love and start our lives anew
As lovers not as enemies at war
I dream we could be one not stay as two
That surely is a dream worth fighting for
Author notes
It stinks and I have no idea why I decided to write one as I don't think I've read any even by Keats I like
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I don't think this "stinks" as you say in your notes. A Keats is not easy to compose and you did it with a clear image.
Love,
Amera♥
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this is a fine, fine sonnet done wonderfully well! It would be pretty near perfect if you change the title!! Loved it! bravo... bravo... bravo...
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Mmmmm...I'm not sure that I like it either, just doesn't seem to flow and that is not like you
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