Stop the pain,
Stop the hurt,
Stop playing "Big Brother".
I'm not what you used to know,
And I will no more support you!
If thunder screamed upon my head,
And bloody skies rained or flooded,
I still keep the feelings leaking!
Stop the pain,
Stop the hurt,
Stop watching me!
If stains of guilt remained,
And you felt so ashamed,
I still be bloody afraid,
to utter a shapless lie
That you don't deserve!
Stop the pain,
Stop the hurt,
Stop playing "Big Brother"
Author notes
Yeah, I liked the picture very much & its name reminded me of my all time favorite novel, 1984.
A contest entry
- PIF Dark by Riftkin.
625 points, ended July 15, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - NO RULES--PREWRITES ALLOWED by Subete Hitsuzen.
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checked out the prompt, looks like it fit pretty well. great job and good luck
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Well written for the prompt...
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Thank you for your comment
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Well
I wonder just who this pertains to. Perhaps a sibling or just a friend that causes an annoyance. But if it causes pain by all means stop.
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Great concept
Now only if a million people would listen
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Thnx alot for the comment. Really appreciate it. & Yeah, hope people would listen.
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I asked for dark and got it here thank you for entering. Riftkin
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Thnx for the HM.
Glad that you liked it.
Have a cool day.
Heba
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