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Saved by the Tree Fairy

sitting alone
moaning its low mellow tone
that old tree
on the top, the hilltops you can see
Don't step a wrong step
or you will lose your walking pep
you don't want to fall off the old old tree
i can tell you're thinking, no not me.
so stay right where you are
i know you wish you had a bar
I'll come and save thee
let's hope that the tree does not capture me
I'm coming, I'm coming
A cheerful tune I am humming.
There we go, you're off the branch
you can go back now to your society ranch
wait, what did you say?
you prefer to stay with me in this most adventurous way?
I'd love your company but it's dangerous here
trust me, I know one fellow who lost his ear
but you're stubborn so you stay with me
the wild fairy of the tree
we'll have lots of fun
We'll climb trees till the day is done!

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  • israeligirlstuckinca
    July 24, 2008

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    great job! You get better and better as a writer every day! I love it! If a poem can be charming, this one is. (I know I sound like I'm patronizing, but I'm not, or at least not intentionally! )


  • Peripatetic gold member
    July 13, 2008

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    This is incredibly enchanting. I wish there would always be a tree fairy there for me when I go out too far on an unstable limb.
    Yes, we are either stubborn or peristent in pursuing adventures and challenges which are not particularly safe. If they were safe, they wouldn't be adventurous, would they? Still, it's good to have a non-judgmental yet capable and wise companion on these adventures.
    This poem has a charming cadence, with a light rhyming pattern which seems entirely appropriate from a fairy creature as we have grown to think of them in our culture.
    Excellent write!


  • Frodofan silver member
    July 13, 2008

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    Your rhymes are a little weak and forced. You're letting them dominate what you say, instead of having them decorate your words.

    I like the main fairy concept though. It's definently an original look at the picture.

    Thanks for entering.