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fade

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

under the sun

and moon

i fade

 

 

like an aging fabric

my purple

is a tarnished mirror

where only shades

of grey reside

 

 

fragile

 

 

on my walk between

thought

and a curse

of scorn

 

 

i am a distilled perfume

made of flattened flowers

fermenting

 

 

nights of breathless

have long since passed

yet

the sea still cradles

slender bodied waves

to the shores

 

 

i am an aggregate

of life

    tumbling

 

 

but

when death comes to me

that lady

will raise her glass

under the sun

or moon

 

 

and become

 intoxicated

in shades

    of purple

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • poet2angels gold member
    April 15

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    I was searching for this poem to add to my list of favorites by you...Finding it is like discovering a gem lost from a setting and putting it back....sigh...This is one of my very favorites...

    Lynda

  • poet2angels gold member
    July 22, 2008
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    sigh



    Had to come back and read it again.....
    Yep, same effect....♥


  • poet2angels gold member
    July 21, 2008
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    This made me sigh and flowed over me in waves of purple sunsets....I love this so much

    Lynda


  • desert places
    July 14, 2008

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    I do especially enjoy the line "an aggregate of life tumbling". And the imagery with the mirror and faded purple, age taking its toll on perfume, that's all very beautiful.


  • toomysterious
    July 14, 2008

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    Time has a way of changing things, but "intoxicated in shades of purple", now that promises hope, if that's heaven I'll go, and writing poetry is definitely a heavenly pursuit.

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    July 13, 2008
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    I want to be likeyou.


  • apples fell
    July 13, 2008

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    I love the use of "f" words in your fourth little stanza, I guess you could call it. Very strong word choices carried throughout, especially in your second stanza. This is whimsy without being stupidly so. I'm a little unsure about the use of "and" in your final stanza. An easier transition there I think could have helped, but this aside, I really enjoyed your expression. Your stuff always takes me on a journey. This was a very pleasant one.

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