I see you sitting there thinking,
that just because I appear to be blind.
I don't see the thoughts,
that are deeply embeded in your mind.
You think that I am sheltered,
you think I do not see.
But in my observations,
I know who you're to be.
You think that I'm a "nice guy",
you like to think I care.
Yet I won't take no sympathy,
if you create your own despair.
After just a few days,
you tell me that you love and trust.
I hang up the phone and I start to laugh,
you're another victim of lust.
I tell you of my hideous past,
and how I came to be.
And everyone keeps holding on,
they say that they love me.
They see my name and walk to the flame,
you perish in my fire.
You'd do it again if you had the chance,
you'd be a victim of desire.
It's not that I don't care at all,
and think that your to blame.
But I won't sit and watch you cry,
you choose to wallow in your shame.
You think that I'm a caring guy,
who's nothing better to do.
Than spend my nights in ponder and worry,
and waste my precious time on you.
If you can stand and prove to me that you're among the precious few,
that I actually believes in what they say and follows through.
Then I will be your greatest friend,
and follow you till life shall end.
Author notes
Option 3. I saw this option last night and was extremely pumped. It's a lazy Sunday, and I don't think my poem delivered what I wanted it to but perhaps it did. It's no where near my greatest work.
Funny thing is, lots of people can see this yet they'll choose to overlook the warning.
A contest entry
- OptionsOptionsPleaseEnter [PW] by DanielleNicole.
800 points, ended July 20, 20 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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I absolutely loved it I mean it's just amazing ^^ just purely you! brilliant and intelligent
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Quite an interesting piece. It wasn't what I was expecting when you mentioned the contest last night, but you always do manage to suprise me. Good luck.
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You have such an immense talent with your poetry...You have quickly gained favoritism in my tope 10 to read poets...I love the way you make things flow so fluently, and this one is no less of a masterpiece, than all that I have read of yours, so far...one little glitch...the 3rd line from the bottom...
"that I actually believes in what they say and follows through."
I think you might want to remove that "I" ......
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Not many people can make me read past the first part but your poem did i read it from first line to last and then read it again.This piece of writing is sheer brilliance i loved how you use something new in each part and my favorite part is the last stanza its well written,uses much description and shows how gifted you truely are.
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