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Crossover

Reach out for the loving hand of my heart
Crossover the river that runs through us
Reality and the place where we start
Offer our exterior selves to fuss
Sage to our inner self is internal
So that you can be free of the certain
One that opens the gate of infernal
Veils that are in the luminous curtain
Ever waving diaphanous and free
Real as the spoken words that dissect love
And transcends the vast river of the sea
Sending the pulsating visions above
So reach out and pull the strings of my heart
Let’s cross the river where we shall not part

 

 

 

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English sonnet with internal Acrostic Nonet.

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A contest entry

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  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    October 22, 2008

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    i like this i think you really did a great awesome job with this poem here good luck to you in the contest

  • Eusebius
    July 16, 2008

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    bravo

    I loved the poem and I stand utterly amazed and astounded at the acrostic! Certainly, Amera, you are one of the few people who might have cracked the old "enigma" code of the Germans in 1940! wonderful and most amazing! Bravo...Bravo....Bravo...


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 13, 2008

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    WOW! I'm speechless!! How on earth did you manage to combine 3 forms!! Oustanding!

    I am so impressed! Not only with your ability, but also the depth and meaning of the write(s) ...

    WOW again!


  • Faeryn
    July 13, 2008

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    This is amazing! Only you can combine 3 forms and weave it into a masterpiece. I am in awe reading this; it is so good.
    Love you lots,
    Tay


  • JohnnyD gold member
    July 13, 2008

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    crossover, crossover, send Amera right over
    for a roll in the beauty of Italian clover

    Siting at a table in Tuscany wearing a bonnet
    she proceeds to create an intriguing sonnet

    might she sit there all the entire summer day
    writing and writing, eating curds and whey

    perhaps she will, or she won't, but after she ate
    that there poetry is bound to be yummy and great


  • Desire gold member
    July 13, 2008

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    Oh My~

    I just Love when You pen these type of forms- for the presentation is stunning also the message stains the Mind- I get a three for one deal
    Love the words: pulsating visions
    Excellent!!

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • malmadre gold member
    July 13, 2008

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    A work of art! Truly! and this is what I aspire to be, a writer that can create this kind of poem that is so memorable, a blending of forms, I am astounded and awed and challenged to write beyond my paltry verse.


  • HaleyMary
    July 13, 2008

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    Beautiful write, Amera. This is the most amazing poem of yours that I've read. It seems like the styles and forms of poetry you can write are endless. Thanks for sharing your talent and best of luck in the contest.


  • Rovingone gold member
    July 13, 2008
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    This is amazing Amera. You are a genious. What an astounding work of art. I am spellbound.


  • paulcreates silver member
    July 13, 2008

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    All I can say is wow...I've never seen one of these. Is there no end to the types and combinations of sonnets?
    Beautiful work Amera. You're so creative.

    Paul


  • echo-ink
    July 13, 2008

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    This was just beautiful, I loved the metaphor's,

    Hand of my heart, rivers that run through us, sage....
    to our inner self is internal, such beautiful words to beckon your love with. chock another one up for Amera. These three bunnies will help you and your love crossover, *bet you'll meet in the middle of the river*. hehehe. Much love and a sloppy wet kiss to the cheek. HA!


  • PerVirtuous
    July 13, 2008

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    I do not feel qualified to comment on this. It is far beyond my grade-level. Like a kindergartener viewing a book on the Theory of Relativity and knowing it is something important and magical, but unable to comprehend it. This is a wonderful read and a massive effort. Once again you have awed me with your talent and your heart.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    July 13, 2008

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    Fiendishly clever construction and both poems are in your authentic voice. You are safe here, there is no way I'm trying to copy this
    No-one outdoes the Queen at these.


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    July 13, 2008

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    oh this is cool

    I like this style, never saw this one before, nice form
    as you put the scenery to my eyes and i hear you read it out loud, very well written thank you for this entry, good luck
    Lin

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