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Frozen beauty



In days when magic ruled the world of men
When dragons tried to save us all from sin
Inside a brooding castle in the glen
Penhellyn wove a spell designed to win

He trapped in ice the mighty fairy Queen
Seen still in her unearthly majesty
She cannot break apart the icy screen
Clean crystal walls that mean she's never free

Yutao has tried to melt the ice with fire
Irate at what the wizard dared to do
Few spells can stand against a wirm's desire
Higher powers than his have set him here like glue

This spell will surely fall apart in bliss
Miss Right can free them both with just one kiss



Author notes

If you look at the comments you will see Allan has troubles with higher powers, which for me is usually a two syllable phrase (I can do either word as 2 beans but usually they are one each), it is hard to come up with an Iambic phrase starting with a rhyme for eye (since of course true rhyme only works on the stressed syllable) but I shall keep looking for something that will work for all.


A "PerVirtuous Shakespearian Princess Sonnet" I hope.
That is the rhyme scheme for the ends of the lines is abab cdcd efef and for the heads of the lines is baba dcdc fefe gg.

I have done three or four attempts at these sonnets now, and while I like the idea I haven't really come up with anything that I feel has been enhanced by the "double rhyming" I think there is a poem out there that will really work in it, but I haven't found it.

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  • Melissa Burns
    July 21

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    Thank you for the entry into my ever so humble little contest. I wish you all the best of luck in the contest!!!!!!


    Pic is breathtaking - is that a sculpture somewhere??? It should be!

  • PerVirtuous gold member
    July 19

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    This would have finished higher if all the lines were decasyllable. L12 is 12 syl, and that is a NO NO in English Sonnets.

    • cricketjeff gold member
      July 19
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      higher rhymes with fire and powers with ours for me
      I assume you have hi-er and pow-ers

  • Amera gold member
    July 15

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    This is pure magic and beauty. The Princess sonnet is hard to compose and you did it and made it look easy. I really enjoyed this poem.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 14

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    Fabulous tale you have penned for this picture! Love the form... enjoyed the whole piece!


  • Blue Rew silver member
    July 13

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    Descriptive in just the right measure to
    set the scene...
    I always admire someone who sees dragons
    as guardians for that is my view. The image
    only strengthens a sort of mini ballad. Blue


  • The Painting Poet gold member
    July 13

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    Marvin is blue? Oh bothersnipes and grumblewits back to the easel for me. Nice fantasy write too

    Jem xxx


  • PerVirtuous gold member
    July 13
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    Excellent! Straight to the finalists list.


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    July 13
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    tale well told

    I'm fascinated. They don't let us own dragons in Canada.


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      July 13
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      I've just read Jeffs reply to you. I see he has mentioned Marvin, now Marvin would be most upset because he forgot to mention a most important part of his life style. He is a very sartorial dragon and is always seen in a silk waistcoat and should he ever find out, Jeff will be in trouble

    • cricketjeff gold member
      July 13
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      Own a dragon?!?!?!
      Of course not Canada is hardly a slave state
      Marvin is totally shocked by the idea

      (Marvin is a friend of mine, he is short sighted, slightly over weight and blue and breathes fire and can fly (although not well) but apart from that lives a perfectly normal life !!)
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