Words build bars
starving sunlight,
as prejudice
plays petty pretence
on streets of bitter defeat...
discrimination dances
in slanderous slurs,
spurring animosity
to slide uncaught
from elder tongues
of too taut tinctures
and false freedoms
diminish
in frames of ill-feeling,
stealing moments
of memory's motes--
causing calamity to coat itself
in idiotic ideals
as sight loses plight
in circumstance's cells
and lies loiter
long after they are spent
from greying grievances
of clipped wings.
Please tell me what you think
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Opening line is a grabber, builds thereafter from the springboard of a basic truth...so very well done... poetry with a cause... PK
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wow, i really liek this, you were very discriptive, and i love the wording, great job and good luck
stephanie
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Very good
Hello.poet...your poem is one side of the coin..may be in your next you can show the other side.
Roy-rahbar.
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I didn't tell only of one side of a coin...prejudice is exactly that...it matters not for creed, colour, religion etc. The opposite of this would be equality and even though many strive for it, this isn't an ideal world and if you're going to be honest, you may as well be totally honest. Class segregates many in society, fashion and all of the above...there are many, many ways a person can be prejudice towards another.
Just Me
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True indeed.
I read this the way it is. And the truth about being ignorant is very much illustrated with the use of powerful words though it's quite simple at all.
I love the lines: in idiotic ideals
as sight loses plight
yup, many has been blinded just because of being clouded with idiocy. -
Superb
Wow, fantastical; I like it just the way it is. Very vivid imagery, indeed. Thank you for sharing it with us.
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wow this is very power. I love the praise lies loiter long after they are spend from greying grievances of clipped wings- that is so true! Your whole poem really captures the essence of prejudice or any kind of deliberate oppression very well. It is a poem you could read before an audience. It is one of the more well written free verse that I have read on this site.
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