From clouded minds that push and shove
enshrouded by vacuity up above
awakens mans torpid dementia dreams
with phantoms conscious evil screams.
Apparitions sanguine silent haze,
obscures realities darkest days.
With inexorable graphic wrath
insanity carves a deadly path.
Envisioned nightmares bloodied streams
meld rivers in red shimmering sheen's
beneath ghostly eyes scrutiny views
where death lies wait in sordid stews.
Focused on the wandering lost and weary
who stumble alone through swamps dark and eerie
to fall victim to the fury of devouring beast
in solitudes lurking realms demonic feast.
Author notes
photo prompt
credit: googles, Watching eyes
In a list
A contest entry
- PIF Dark by Riftkin.
625 points, ended July 15, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything Goes by silentxparadise93.
600 points, ended September 11, 2008, 80 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The darkwrite Challenge Returns by Ktulu Blackwolfe.
800 points, ended October 11, 2008, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I like the picture...goes great with the write. Excellent job with this.
**Ktulu Blackwolfe** -
Merry meet,
Congratulations on winning the Bronze. This was a hard contest with lots of really good entries.
This was a nice and shivery poem. Just the right length and such wonderful descriptive phrasing.
Some of my favorite lines are:
"awakens mans torpid dementia dreams
with phantoms conscious evil screams"
"Envisioned nightmares bloodied streams"
"Focused on the wandering lost and weary...
to fall victim to the fury of devouring beast"
Just wonderful phrases.
Again, congratulations on winning the Bronze.
Amythest
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I asked for dark and got it here thank you for entering. Riftkin
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awakens mans torpid dementia dreams with phantoms conscious evil screams.beneath ghostly eyes scrutiny views where death lies wait in sordid deluge.wow a fantastic take on the promt with such a powerful depth of dark emotions good luck in the contest
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THIS IS MOST AWESOME. VERY DARK AND A WELL EDUCATED WRITE. TRULY A WINNER TO ME!!!!! !!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!
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thank you for
your kind words I am pleased you liked it.
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Ferocious in its painting of darkness unformed.
Reds converge and take on focused meaning of
foreboding. I did question "where death lays wait in sordid deluge" thinking it should read lies waiting
instead. Best to you in the theme. Blue
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thank you Blue
for the heads up and kind words . Nice to see you about, your missed for sure. Hope all is well.
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