Greetings to you Sir,
I have a favor to ask,
Kindly listen to my story,
So I may know how You would react.
When I was a child, You taught me Your principles,
for those are helpful in my life when I grow old,
but due to my tolerance of my imperfection,
I became Your indirect opposser.
I was still young and yet you knew,
I'd such stupid things that I'd regret soon,
but because of your loving kindness, You didn't stop me,
so I may know which way to go.
When I took the left turn and found all sorts of pleasure,
money, fame, of different worlds,
but then my heart was filled with emptiness,
and regret was all I had left.
I took the right turn and continued,
I didn't move a muscle and started slacking,
but later I learned that it's nothing compared to You,
I've got loads of work and yet, refreshment is what You have for me.
I started walking towards the center of my life's intersection,
and I found you at the far end,
at first I thought you'll berate me for what I did,
but Your undeserved love is all I receive,
and yes, to You who is concerned,
I thank you and appreciate your kind understanding and consideration.
Glory to Your name!
Sincerely Yours,
-lovelyn
Author notes
We people are sinners, thanks to Jehovah who didn't count on them...
***I have read and follow the rules***
hey, thanks for adding a review....
Comments
1 - 8 of 8
-
They say it is alright not to believe in him...
he will always believe in you.
This is truly beautiful lass...
It is the pureness of love that you so eloquently write of.
You should be proud...
it is a fine piece indeed.
Blessings always,
Lowell Poe.
-
Well, the letter is good. I think, if you're going to begin with 4 liners than you should end with 4 liners. The last stanza's 1st line is alittle long, you should shorten it or... I see that the 2nd to the last line kind of rhymes with the 1st line, so you could make intersections singular and it would in it's way, balance the stanza off.
-
life..
Teaches us many things some the hard way. We can be taught many things, but we have to find our own direction. Bravo to those that are there to help you when you fall and stear you in the right directions. Good story, The Shaker
-
This was a great poem sorta like what I was going through, I had lost my way but I had found it again. I usually skip long poems cause i never have the time but yous was so gd i couldn't skip a single word. Bravo
-
It's confusing to see into another person's eyes and thoughts.
My childhood was less than favorable. Catholicism was the cement that drove me to Agnosticism (this is strictly my opinion) and I don't regret or blame my beliefs on anyone but myself.
I pray though, that there are more people like you -lovelyn.
(Twould) be a reason for me to sway more towards God.
-
Outstanding
I loved the whole concept of this poem- I think we all lose our way sometimes. I liked the way you told a story and made it very real. An interesting and thoughtful poem.
-
I absolutely loved every second of this poem it was wonderfully written. Very cleaver use of words and I definetly found myself wanting to keep reading. i loved the flow it definetly went along nicely. Wonderful write. Very refreshing and unique. I definetly enjoyed reading so I will be reading more if I have not read more of your poems to begin with. Keep writing you are a true poet. Maybe you can check out some of my poetry i would really love to hear your opinion.
-
I really liked it. It pulled me right in and i couldn't stop reading. I love the idea. I didn't personnally like the way you worded everything but that is just my opinion. Other than that i think that it was great.
Adding your comment:
1 - 8 of 8
