I don't know if you see it, and I don't know if you care,
the pain you cause me every day is more than I can bare.
I'm trying not to loose control, and trying not to break,
but everytime I look at you, it's more than I can take.
My soul is crushed and my heart is broken, yet, still, you are all I see.
I don't think you really know, and you're standing right in front of me!
I hate this endless damage that opens every wound,
and I hate the way you make it better just to cause more ruin.
I know your heart is taken, and i know we've gone too far,
but I don't know how to live without you, all the time spent in your arms....
This isn't finished, but I really just can't see past the tears right now...
Author notes
...is currently under construction...
I don't know how to finish this right now... It's a little too painful at the moment, but any feedback on what I've got so far would be wonderful. Thanks.
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wow
I don't think I could see past the tears in my eyes!
truly touching dear
and I know exactly how you feel...It cause the lie that time heals all wounds just doesn't cut it
makes me want to cry right now!
"My soul is crushed and my heart is broken, yet, still, you are all I see.
I don't think you really know, and you're standing right in front of me" is my favorite part most defianitly
oh I hate to say this
but plz finish
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I know how you feel girl trust me i really do but soon you'll find that no matter what his heart is not yours anymore but don't give up hope just yet hold on and most of all be strong
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awww babygurl, I know it hurts to write with a broken heart, but i promise that it is the moment where your heart spills soo much into a piece that it become a beautiful work of art! So far it is really beautiful!
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the emotional elegance of this poem is capable to capture the reader's attention...the poetic expression is just great...you certainly have a great talent to express your feelings...all the best...
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I think what you have so far is a very great begaining! It's deep and it made me want to cry too. Im really sorry that you have to feel that deep suffering pain it really shows through the poem =[. All the lines are great and flow.....You have a very good talent. I hope things get better for you =\....Again great poem!
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This is very deep! But try to feel better...I really hope you will. I know hoe you feel, we all have these stupid days. It's such a good write. Finish it when you can.
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You have penned a very emotionasl write. I know the pain of falling in love with someone not free. It is a pain that never goes away. I have not found an answer to relieve all the pain. We are best friends and that is better then not having him in my life at all. I hope your pain lessen in time. Time does not heal everything. I hope you finish your poem. I find writing about the pain truly helps. You take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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This IS a very powerful piece, even though it is unfinished. Very well written. Love is kind of a confusing thing isn't it? God bless.
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wow
this is really powerful....My soul is crushed and my heart is broken, yet, still, you are all I see.
I don't think you really know, and you're standing right in front of me! ....those are my favorite lines....and i like the fact that you left it unfinished...i think that it adds a very nice touch to this poem......send me a message when you do finish it so i can read the rest!..
keep writing
keep smiling
keep the peace
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Wow, I like it, very raw emotions, sorry that you are going through this. Great write.
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I like what I see so far...
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well..it may never finish..this is what the love is my friend..very touching story is yours.....and my thanks for sharing it...my friend..
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