the earth is an interesting place
the colors are strange
cryptic from above
rain in my system
racing through me like blood in my veins
floating above
getting a grey tan
once im burnt
the rain pours
leaving me
the cloud
In a list
A contest entry
- Personify! by BellaD.
800 points, ended July 15, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I like the creative concept of a cloud looking down on the earth's surface. You have some very good imagery in this piece such as "racing through me like blood in my veins" Just my opinion, but the line "getting a grey tan" seemed out of place with the rest of your lines. Nicely done and thank you for entering.
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