Only what you think I am;
a pretty picture in a pretty frame.
I'm every girl you've ever loved
and every girl you've ever hated.
All nice and neat in a pretty frame.
Can't hurt you here, can I?
Can't hurt you here, not all boxed up
inside this frame.
Only a girl, not much of one,
fading into the background.
I'm only what you think I am.
I'm only your perception.
So don't look at me that way,
because I can't hurt you here.
Not inside this frame.
This pretty frame I'm holding up.
But what happens when it slips?
Author notes
Hmm... this is the first poem I've written in a while, so... hopefully I'm not *too* rusty. It's different than most of the poems I've written, too; I'm experimenting stylistically. So, worthwhile poem?
A contest entry
- Dark/Gothic Quickie by SuicidalLover.
500 points, ended July 18, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Honesty is appreciated!
Comments
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Then I'd say not rusty at all. A wonderful poem you penned for the picture. It lies in truth and thats what I love.
~Kystal Angel
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well the style is alright for a free verse piece but there is no subject in the first clause and the enjambment needs a bit of work because after the first stanza it breaks down. it's a fair start though. peace
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