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Spiritual Realm

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Living life while others are dying,
brings mysterious thoughts while trying.
Where oh where is everyone going?
Truly it seems we are not totally knowing.

Spirituality seems to become something we seek,
while there is this energy within,  whom upon is so meek.
Humbling it is to see beyond what is seen,
there must be a God that we can lean?

Spiritual beings whether dead or alive,
this I've come to know while I survive.

There's an energy all around our very being,
which is beautiful for those whom are seeing.

Serenity unfold's with realities to behold,
the spiritual realm in which we are told.
Good or evil is of your own life's choosing,
surrounds us whether we are winning or losing.

Freedom of choice is where we learn,
which brings this unknown energy we yearn.
Journeying through life the best that we could,
shows in those who know the spiritual realm good.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

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Option 3 *stavykm*
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Tell me about religion (yikes hopefully everybody will be open-minded with this one) Not about a petitular religion (though you may if you want but I'm wanting this to go a bit further) Tell me what religion can do to/for a person. Do we really need religion in this day of age? I want to know the thought process behind religion. Like why people have the need for religion. Please please don't preach to me. If your going to be for religion, tell me why..don't throw verses at me pleaseeee. I'm one of those scientific people, that question things..so make me question my own beliefs! But please try to do it in a smart way.

A contest entry

Do you ever pay attention to what is unseen with your own eyes?

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Comments

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  • penman gold member
    September 5, 2008

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    Wonderful

    Such a touching and well expressed poem. So full of inspiration and spirituality. Congrats on the gold.


  • City-of-Angels
    September 1, 2008

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    You know I really like this, I was a bit iffy on allowing religious type poems. But this is a lot different. I like it
    It's not one of those "shove down your throat" kind of spiritual rights..it's nice
    Thanks you so much for entering ..good luck


  • thejollytinker
    July 22, 2008
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    stavykm, will you please give me a pass on that suggestion? I hadn't paid close attention to your page before. It was not only wrong, ("whom" refers to living beings- "which" to inanimate objects) it was in horrible form. Can't imagine the loss, but I'm really happy you have a family. Dad always said, "Family is there to love you and support you- but they'll eat you if you're not careful." My apologies.


  • thejollytinker
    July 22, 2008

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    Hey, that was fun and humbling to read. Don't kill me- just take another look at line 8. Maybe, "there must be a God upon which we can lean?" I hate making suggestions, just trying to be honest. The gist of the poem moved me.


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    July 22, 2008

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    Superb

    Aye, 'tis a fine write, indeed, with which I quite agree. Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one.

  • VeritasLiberte
    July 22, 2008

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    Very thought provolking piece indeed! I would just make a few "minor adjustments":

    *2nd stanza, last line, I would replace "that" with "upon whom" (better cadence).
    *3rd stanza, last line, change "whom" to "who" (proper English).
    *4th stanza, first line, drop the "'s" from
    "Serenity's" and add an "s" to "unfold", making it "unfolds" (less awkward).
    *5th stanza, last line, change "whom" to "who" (proper English)

    I think you will see how these changes will improve an already good piece! Blessings to you my Sister!


  • Roaddog Wolf
    July 22, 2008
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    this is truly beautiful Kelle

    you have really penned your heart and your precious soul with this poem it is beautiful


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 19, 2008

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    Very thoughtful piece hun that holds so much depth!

    I think that faith is invisible, but for those who have it, vivid and real!


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    July 16, 2008

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    very deep write my friend,

    awareness of the energy that makes up all of God's creation

    is a wise thing to have.

    to know that the energy that we send into the world is what creates are world.

    we choose.

    exquisite truth you have capured in your lovely write.

    God bless...


  • Talking Toni gold member
    July 13, 2008

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    Very Deep!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    And intense!!!!!!!!!It really provokes one to thinking and seaching deep inside their spiritual being. Soul searching,if you will. I do it alot!!! You convey this so well to the reader Kelle. I think so many thoughts but cannot seem to get them to come out alot of times as I wish them to so that is why I don't have many new poems, because until my thoughts can come to me in the form of my words the way I want them to come ot then I do not write them...This s incredible!!! I love it all!!!~~Thanks for sharing my dear friend!!!~~Toni~~


  • TyrannyForestFairy
    July 13, 2008

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    Awesome! I love the spiritual theme put into the context of this piece. The rhyme flow is lovely along with the terminology used. Great work

  • goalsv
    July 13, 2008

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    Very smooth and inlighting. Lovd the first two lines they start it off so well. The last two finish it just right with a look into your soul in the middle.


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    July 13, 2008

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    I love your rhyme in this my Aunty, natural

    thoughtful words..the prompt, well you've dont it justice..this was great to read



    Cindy


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    July 13, 2008

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    well I can see you choosing the enlightened areas of your muse before turning them into the piece of a poetry..well done...

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