It's that beat of the heart,
that twinkle in the eye,
It's that thread of confidence.
It's that reassurringly still, voice that says,
be at ease, all is well, though reality screams otherwise.
It is that conviction that your desires, and dreams are not merely possible, but inevitable.
It's that force that makes you try,and try, though experience has taught you cruel and contrary lessons,
Hope, the jewel of the soul.
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beautiful. thanks for entering i like this piece,
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Hope, the jewel of the soul.
A beautiful ending.
Though i liked to read this short and simple write, i felt you could have done better structuring.
it'll make this beautiful poem more presentable
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indeed!
hope is the jewel of the soul, without even a tinge of hope, nobody gets anywhere... you cannot reach anything, your drreas, without hope and faith! this has expressed that perfectly well, i like how you spoke about hope as an important thing in life in every different way possible! great try, though i think you could break this up into a few stanzas... but thats just a mini suggestion, other than that, this was pretty impressive! keep penning, and thanks for this entry! >.<
~beauty of silence
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quite well written, although I do have a few suggestions.
the sixth line and the seventh line can be trimmed. they drift from the flow, and it almost feels like this whole piece is an essay or a story, rather than a poem. the beginning was great but in the middle you seemed to lose the flow. but you have some amazing line here.
thanks for entering.
-checkmate
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wow!
i could feel hope in every single word of this poem. It made me want to scream out loud and just want to take on the world while dancing in the rain.
"that twinkle in the eye,"
it laways works doean't it? Thank you for igniting that sliver of hope in my heart again. 
I do hope you live by these too. An amzing poem with so much heart and grit. Good luck in the contest!
loveees,
transit~
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So true, so true. Hope wouldn't be hope if the outcome were guaranteed; then it would be an expectation, not hope against the odds. Not sure that I said that very well, but YOU did a great job. Keep em coming!
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"Hopefully" written.
What can I say but that, in reading this short but powerful piece, it helps give me.....HOPE! Thanks for the reminder that God is our hope, and gives us such as we trust in HIM!
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I love how this poem builds to a crescendo and then hope reveals itself as the "jewel of the soul". Beautifully done.
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Really like the piece. The message, and the feel I get reading it. Nice write!! I especially liked:
It's that beat of the heart,
that twinkle in the eye,
It's that thread of confidence.
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