If only I could turn back time,
undo the choices I have made.
Remove the tear stains
from my pillow,
to never have your name
spoken from my lips.
Oh the pain that would not
have come into my life.
How I would not have fogotten
how to laugh and smile,
because your heart grew cold
and your words angry.
Yes, the willow would still weep,
but no longer weep for me,
Night stars would continue to fall.
but It would not be our star,
that tumbles to earth
and dies.
To go back and take away
that one moment in time.
Would take away all the pain
and agony within my heart.
Would be that moment we met,
when I first heard your
sweet hello.
In a list
A contest entry
- If Only.... by jasminerose.
1050 points, ended July 23, 28 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Oh My~
This tugs at the Heartstrings and Excellent take on the prompt
These lines:
Yes, the willow would still weep,
but no longer weep for me,
...had me balling like a baby
Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
-Throws confetti-
Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Oneday... A, Hello~ will be the best thing to ever happen to you...congrates on the shiny tin Sandy
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Congratulations Sandy I truly enjoyed this the first time I read it and I just enjoye it once again.
Many Blessings,
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Oh this is so very emotional and your words touch the heart so deep...Beautifully done
Lynda
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If only.......!!!!
Ah yes! The cry of all our hearts, lamenting how "the former days were better than these" as the scripture states! I can relate to this to a point, except in MY case, the "regret" is in how I was the one that caused the hurt to her! And how I wish I could go back and change that! But alas! The "past is gone", as they say, although, it never really seems so be "dead", as memories linger on in our hearts and minds. And have you noticed, too often, it's the PAIFUL ones that seem to be the most outstanding? Even as you express here. Great write from a GREAT POET!
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Wonderful Comment!!!!!!!!!!!!
What a wonderful comment Stephen. Thank you so much. I do know how you can relate to this. It matters not who causes the pain. It hurts the same. And you are so right. It is the most painful and the most sad memories that linger much too long in the broken heart.
Thank you for reading my sweet brother and friend.
Blessings,
Sandy
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We all would like to change things we have done. Well writen with deep hurt and thought. I wish you could.
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Lovely Comment
Thank you for the thoughtful comment.I do asppreciate it. This one was an emotional write for me.
I always enjoy when you drop by.
. You take care my friend. Sandy
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wow Sandy you have me feeling with this one,
many emotions well done and best of luck to you in
the contest.
Blessings.
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Beautifully written with your heart and all the pain and suffering from just one moment in time! If only... I agree! Thank you so very much for this excellent entry to our contest! Jasminerose:f
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sounds bitter truth...love hurts when it's the wrong person to start with...there are soft spoken lovers who know how to string you along then dangle you with a noose around your neck...the true colors of someone you love appear and you become helpless in heart...but not forsaken...your knife is now sharp so you can cut that string of misery from your weary soul...good for you girl
Mal
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Wonderful Comment
Hello Malabu, It has been a while to see you stop by. So nice to se you. I hope you have been well. Thank you for the great thoughtful comment. It is so appreciated. You hit the nail on the head. Time to let that broken heart fly up up and away.
You take care.
Hugs and Smiles,
Sandy
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Well written. Keep this up.
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Thank you dear brother. Hope all ias well. Hugs and Smiles coming your way. Take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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Wow.
I swear reading this is like reading my own thoughts and feeling the old emotions and insecurities come back.
Absolutely fantastic write hun!
Best of luck hun
♥
Stay safe
Love to you
~Manda
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Love your comment sweet Amanda. Thank you for stopping by and reading. You take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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Oh Sandy
how do you manage to put my life in to words so often. Yes turning back time to that first hello would erase lots of pain, but also lots of wonderful things so I really don't think I would want to go back. I was talking with a friend about that recently.
Rhonda
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Good Morning Rhonda
Thank you for stopping by and reading. Always a delight to hear from you and read your comments. You take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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Broken Heart
A heart so torn to become encrusted with mistrust and regret. To let the world change and grow without your tears to feed the flowers. The pain would never have been, yet, so many happy time between would be lost. Great poem very moving with clear strong images.
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Wonderful Coment!!
Hello, Thank you for this great comment and sharing your thoughts on my poetry. Always look forward to them. I too, try to think its better to have loved and lost then to never have loved at all but somedays I begin to wonder if that is really true. Is it trully worth all the pain? You take care dear friend.
Bless You,
Sandy
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SO SPECIAL!!!
I believe everyone wishes at one tme or another they could go back to a certain time in the past and rewrite the course of those days. I have more than one of those memories I truly wish I could rewrite again.
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Good Morning Kevin
Thank you for reading my poem and leaving me a lovely comment. You take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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i really like this-->
in fact i think this is awesome in its own way. i know there are a lot of forlorn poems out there and most deal with love and loss of love and the illusion of love but this really is good! the fact that you blend in the shooting stars and the weeping willow for imagery is something i havent seen before. it ties up the title very well to the ultimate yearning for goodbye and the encompassing saddness related by wishing the connection had never happened...
thank you for sharing this! i like it!
-peace to you-
-dev
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Lovely Comment
Hello, Thank you for stoping by and reading my poem. I so appreciate it. Glad you enjoyed reading it. You seem to understand the feelings behind my words. You take care. Sandy
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Kind of reminds me of Cher's "If I could turn back time". This is a compliment. I think your last stanza is my favourite. It makes me feel that although there is great sadness in this song, there is a lingering joy from the memory of first greeting. Have you ever seen Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind? Kind of reminds me of that.
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Nice Comment
Thank you or stopping by and reading my poem. You take care. Sandy
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Wow! You took my breath away on this poem. It all is true. It does start out at hello. I have too may broken hearts not to be able to relate to this poem. I love the background. Good luck in the contest. In Love & Light... Blessed Be! ~~Iridessa MoonFlower~~
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Lovely Comment
Thank you so much for the really nice comment. So glad you enjoyed it. You take care. Sandy
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I just don't know what to say...just that I had the capability to create something as fine as this.
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Nice Comment
Thank you for stopping by and reading. You take care.
Sandy
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Just totally beautiful and it has a very vivid concept of "If Only"...you captured the prompt in excellence...ennovy
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Lovely Comment
Hello ennovy, Thank you for stopping by and reading. I appreciate your lovely comment. You take care, Sandy
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Wow this is heart wrenching. Love can be such a burden and pain sometimes. Good piece very emotional
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Thank You
Thank you for reading and leaving a nice comment. You take care. Sandy
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when the honeymoon stage is over it often becomes difficult to keep the hearts stitched together. i like this because it is relatable..
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Nice Comment
Thank you for stopping by and reading. I appreciate your nice comment. Take care. Sandy
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Wow. Excellent portrayal of emotions in this. Sometimes in life, unfortunately, these times come into our lives.
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Nice Comment
Thank you for stopping by and reading. I appreciate your nice coment. You take care,
Sandy
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