i woke up one day from a crazy dream
one where the world wasnt the way it seemed
it was backwards and sideways and upside down
if you wanted to smile it made you frown
there were flying elephants and checkerboard eyes
and crazy people running around
I walked on a path that clearly said 'out'
but the artificial grass and a steeper climb made me doubt
suddenly a kingdom appeared on a cloud
the knight came behind me and indly bowed
he took me to the king
I saw the most handsome prince in the world
gastly pale and handsome when he twirled
but he was a killer, I could tell
this whole world put me under a spell
I had to get away
I ran passed the 'out' path
the prince screamed out his terrible wrath
I jumped out a hole and into a pan
I was being cooked by a mid-sized Sedan
im so glad i woke up
I have a fear of canibal cars
Author notes
option 1
take a bow and exit stage left
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A contest entry
- Build Me Worlds, Tell Me Stories, Show Me How Creative You Can Be by Enkeli.
550 points, ended July 28, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wonderful! This is quite clever.
"I jumped out a hole and into a pan
I was being cooked by a mid-sized Sedan
im so glad i woke up
I have a fear of canibal cars"
Those last lines made me laugh. I love the lighthearted feel to this poem, and the rhyme suits it well. You definitely showed some unique creativity in this.
I'd like to point out though, that there are a few typos... I found three. Please run this through spell check or read over it yourself.
Finally, I'd like to thank you for following the rules and putting what I requested in your AN.
Good job, keep writing, and good luck,
Enkeli
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