She paints herself as the person
Everyone wants her to be.
She frames the picture on the wall
For everyone to see.
No one detects any flaws
She grimaces as she hears their applause.
This isn't her. She isn't this.
This is an image, an empty shell.
She feels like running and startng to yell.
"Here I am! This is real!"
But instead she just stays still.
She smiles and waits for them to leave
Before revealing the girl behind the masterpiece.
No one sees her as she quietly walks away.
Without her paint and her mask,
She's invisible in the fray.
Everyone wants a sweet little girl.
No one wants who she really is.
She paints herself again and again,
Wondering if it will ever end.
A contest entry
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500 points, ended July 18, 2008, 8 entries
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Look at the bright side, the girl in this poem is smart enough to adapt herself to any and every surrounding and situation. You can never truly be yourself with anyone. You have to work your surroundings and situations, to get the best out of them. It's rare when you get a surrounding or a situation, that you truly can be yourself in. But, it happens. That's what friendship is for and that is what a intimate relationship you have with that special someone, is for. It happens! But, most of the time, you have to be someone that “they” want you to be, so you can get the best out of it. To be honest, the girl in this poem is smart. True, it does suck being different people, but as long as you don’t lose yourself in all the images you are and you have ONE PERSON to truly be yourself with, then that is a clever thing to do. Not something that should look down upon. Also, are you sure that this girl isn't the image that she puts up, on top of other images? People can be more than one thing.
Nice poem, by the way.
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I loved it, very heart felt and true.
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Not bad ...
but it is rather simplistic. However, the comment below is downright rude.
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You are fourteen. You write like a fourteen year old, and you will for at the most another year. Then you will write like a 15 year old. Duh? right? Let me ask you, why on earth do you think you are the best poet on AP? Well, then you at least have the conceit of a true poet going for you.
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Emotionaly deep~
Other than changing the font so readers can read better I don't see any problems in this.
~Kystal Angel
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Wow – I really liked this... it's very powerful, full of emotions and... wow. I'm speechless. Fantastic write!
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