A gentle rose
That's all she is
Her beauty
And inoscence
And an air of peace.
You picked her
Held her
Loved her.
But you caused her to die.
You left her without water
Love
You abandoned her.
You peeled away her protective barrier
And got to the leaves
And picked those off
One
By
One
Causing her not to be so inoscent.
Her mind now tained by what love has brought her
Regreting her first kiss
Regreting dreaming of you.
The petals slowly fell off
By the lack of love
Her beauty
Slowly morphing
Into something she doesn't understand.
Black eyeliner
Dark clothes
Long sleeves
Hair that is wild and hides
Her beautiful face
From the prying eyes of others
Who could of loved her.
All that's left is a stem
The air of peace
Gone.
But don't worry.
With her blade
She's slowly carving it off
Along with her skin and blood.
The blade dances around her skin
Leaving behind bloody lines
That heal into thin white ones
Blood falls
But not on accident.
Don't worry
She'll complete the deadly deed
You
Started.
Author notes
Alrighty then. Yes, I regret my first kiss... mostly because it was the guy I loved and sadly.. still love.. first kiss and he gave up caring about me. Anyway, pick and choose what you want out of this poem. It's not exactly all about me. I don't really like it but whatever lol.
Comments
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Seriously, lol, that's the best poem I've read in a long time.
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thanks so much
I feel all special that you like it so much XD
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Oh my goodness. Wow, how did you write that? It was so so so beautiful and so so so powerful. You are an amazing writer. The last bit:
She'll complete the deed.
You.
Started.
Was breath taking and...
One.
By.
One.
Was so painful. It was really really painful.
Wow.
I also loved:
But don't worry.
With her blade
She's slowly carving it off
Along with her skin and blood.
The way you set it out was really nice. I like freeverse. They make the poem more interesting. I like the way you changed the verses length.
I reall could go on an on. I loved all of it, you deserve more than three clappy things.
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omg... thank you so much! I'm glad that you enjoyed reading it, and thanks for such the high praise
As for writing, I was inspired by a picture of a white rose and I was pretty upset, so I kind of combined the two :S lol, don't know how though
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OH....... GZZ I DON'T EVEN KNOW WHAT TO SAY I'M SPEECHLESS... THIS IS HOW ALMOST ALL U'R POEMS LEFT ME!!!!!!!!! SPEECHLESS!!!!!!!
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