If only words were possible
to explain exactly how i
f e e l...
If it was possible for me
to turn b.a.c.k the hands
of time i would do so
[[if it made things right...]]
Tell me that e/v/e/r/y/t/h/i/n/g
will be fine
Hold me...
Kiss me...
Smile at me...
Take me away from
All that stresses me
Protect me from the world
If it was simple to just f-o-r-g-e-t
you, I would so in the b:l:i:n:k of an
eye if it meant a l*i*f*e*t*i*m*e of your
happiness...
But it's not that s.i.m.p.l.e;;
I can't PrEtEnD that i don't m i s s
the way that you used to...
Play with me...
Wrestle with me...
Laughed with me...
Layed Next...to...me...
I'm f.u.l.l of regrets now...
but
My heart's tank is on [[E]]
A contest entry
- give me what you're heart says by xoalwaysthinkingxo.
333 points, ended July 17, 2008, 13 entries
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1050 points, ended July 23, 2008, 28 entries
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450 points, ended July 30, 2008, 52 entries
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550 points, ended August 30, 2008, 44 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Lots Of Options by stargazer..
525 points, ended December 27, 2008, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
i'm in a funky state right now....
Comments
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i like it
good write.
good luck. -
oooh...
I like that last line... I just don't get the Dirty retty style... oh, well. To each his own!
he poem itself, has a profound impact on the reader though...
bravo and happy writing!
The Famous Reese Bailey
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Good luck babe.
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'I'm f.u.l.l of regrets now...
but
My heart's tank is on [[E]]'
I loved that last bit, it gives such vived imagery.
♥
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I want someone to be there for me too and promise me that things will turn out okay, but when does that time ever come? *sigh* ah well... Beautifully wrote.
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Ty for entering and sharing your eotion
Lynda
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A lovely poem you have shared with us here.. deep in its emotion and imagery! Thank you so very much for entering!!
Jasminerose
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this was a really great poem. i was just looking for something a little more cheery. somthing to get me away from feeling or regret and sadness. but it is a great read.
thank you so much for entering
and i wish you the best of luck -
love the last line...I'm full of regrets but my hearts running on empty...I think the sticky caps and capitals take away from the true potential of this writing...may I also suggest...laid next to me
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nice write
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:)
good job
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allot of love,we all know how important honest feelings are to poetry,and im positive they are what helped make this poem the success it is.im not a big fan of the format,but it was a nice poem.good luck in the contest.
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beautifully written
I think we've all been there before. I think you expressed The If only sentiment very well...
I especialll liked these lines...oh well who am I kidding I loved lines 1-29...lol
Good Luck!
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