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red petals

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She would struggle
with his silent pause

that would trip his lower gaze 

across her naked existence

 

watching her

burst upon the sharpest point

of indecision.

 

Her skin

folded like ice 

from the lack of fabric

that now lay hesitantly

across the wooden boards.

 

She broke the conflict 

between his mouth and the room

able to eradicate the thickening intention. 

 

His body

ready to detonate her pounding heart

that was about to ignite

unforgettable emotion 

that would spark his manly trigger

into action.

 

In a fleeting moment

her delicate crystal shattered

spilling blood onto the virgin white foundation

she adorned.

 

The walls moved

inside out

as if dynamite had screamed its way into their space ~

 

telling the world

of another open flower

sought and plucked

by unforgiving hands... 

 

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Image Credit: Abstract by enrique
picture and word bank inspired

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  • paulcreates silver member
    July 31, 2008

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    Beautiful interpretation of the word bank and especially the picture prompt Donna. Congratulations on this bronze entry!
    Paul


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    July 30, 2008
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    Is it me or am I only seeing 14 words of the word bank used? HELP.


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    July 30, 2008
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    Wow.

    Word bank? WHERE?

    Excellent work with this verse. You have worked the word bank and the image to a tee. AND

    THIS STANZA

    "watching her
    burst upon the sharpest point
    of indecision."

    FABULOUS!!

    Really really well done and exactly what the contest ordered. Thank you for a Superb entry. Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela


  • Harrisham Minhas
    July 13, 2008

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    Oh that is so sad.
    This disturbing situation has been profoundly expressed using poetic devices.
    I hope that such things stop happening in this world.




  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    July 13, 2008

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    wow this is a v ery powerful write that comes alive with imagery and colour. there was some amazing metaphors within this piece. well done


  • Candy6
    July 12, 2008
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    lovely


  • notorious gold member
    July 12, 2008

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    How colorfully disturbing w/o going over the top...

    "burst upon the sharpest point
    of indecision."
    Loved this.

    "plucked by unforgiving hands"
    Great ending!!

    Good luck This has to place!


  • darkheart76
    July 12, 2008
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    great

    wow

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