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I'm so rejuvenated;
being the naked man
always undone.

I want to be dressed by you,
confident, a rock.
I want to exhale you out
from my pores, inhale laughter,
hold hands with only you and
talk about death.

But there
is everything to hide when
scars are invisible.








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  • Thomas Scott gold member
    July 17, 2008
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    a winner for me

    What other truth could end that poem?
    Excellent.

  • tara wilson gold member
    July 13, 2008

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    I think I just read a piece like this one by Lane...

    this is equally as beautiful...


    • paulcreates silver member
      July 13, 2008
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      Ah, right you are. If you'll put them side by side you may see a counter msg. Sometimes my muse cheats on the test.



      Paul

  • Rowan gold member
    July 13, 2008

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    Sometimes it's more erotic with clothes on.
    Beautifully penned.

    • paulcreates silver member
      July 13, 2008
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      "Sometimes it's more erotic with clothes on."
      ..unless the nakedness is a metaphor for being open and candid.



      Thank you for the compliment.
      Paul


  • Dalaney gold member
    July 12, 2008
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    the night seems full of your shadow...beautiful write, vaguely familiar, touching. love, lane

  • Amarige
    July 12, 2008

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    Very strong romance piece here my friend..I liked the thought of being dressed by you..such a deep love in your words for your special one..God bless Paul
    Ruby

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