within the dominion of any republic
just who is chained to who
when circumstance meets chance
and the frailty, the fragility, of existence
is mirrored in more than theory?
silent witnesses pay the pipers tune,
make no bones about it.
if life imitates art
what is graffiti
if it isn't the writing on the wall?
A contest entry
- Free-Write by polly filla.
1750 points, ended August 12, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
constructive critique and or emotional perspective welcomed
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Living in a parliamentary monarachy, I thought of us all as subjects...is this what Bob Marley meant, Yvette, when he sang:"Get up, stand up, stand up for your rights!"?
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I like this piece a lot, and the last stanza made me laugh. Congrats on the gold for this piece.
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aha! I should'a guessed! (but I really didn't)
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Pardon me, but this made me chuckle outloud! The last line put thie icing on the cake.
In my thinking, the one is chained to other out of need for mutual survival
Joe
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if life imitates art
what is graffiti
if it isn't the writing on the wall?
what is interesting about that is the fact that our country spends billions on covering it up...
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a good piece of poetry, maybe graffiti is the writing on the soul. we all have to pay the piper, and the piper's tune will sail right through us without harm, perhaps!
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if life imitates art
what is graffiti
if it isn't the writing on the wall?
hot damn! that ending is a poem in itself. only critical things: second who should be whom and should it be 'play the pipers tune'? idk, just thinking out loud but right on lady, keep em comin'
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Thankyou dear poet Yes, you are correct, it should be whom if grammaticly correct but I chose who as it seems less pretentious and more accessible.
You are correct in that there is a saying " play the pipers tune" but I wanted to infer pay instead as in price paid for having to acquiese against one's free will to the that of another regime.
Please think aloud whenever you wish, I am always pleased to receive your insights
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'who is chained to who' is not formally correct grammar. it should be 'who is chained to whom', but the way you write it is very clever because it makes the reader stop and think about who is doing the chaining and who, really, is being chained in society. -parsefish
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I think I recognise your style, but I don't know who you are, yet!
enjoy your rhythm, and the whole thing is easily remembered...that's a very good thing!
also, you cast up some interesting thoughts with your "who is chained to who"
if you've used the contest photo' as inspiration, you've captured what I see
one thing; 'graffiti'
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Woah... this is DEEP. I wonder how many who read this really see the very burning message!
"if life imitates art
what is grafitti
if it isn't the writing on the wall?"
Nice!
John
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gorgeous, what an inspiring thought, WHo is chained to who?? the people, the government, such dependency on one another, yet one always feel oppressed, the big picture is a sad one, a republic is it's people, and vice versa, there is no other force involved anywhere, we make our lives so, by refusing to read that obviousness that is so lavishly plastered to our walls.
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Humm..bringing the truths with its new meaning is the name of poetry and you did it..well done...and my thanks for sharing such a wonderful piece...my friend...well done..
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"...if life imitates art
what is grafitti
if it isn't the writing on the wall?"
Like this lots, sis. Here, I normally liken some poets to Picasso, Jaques Louis David ("The Death of Socrates" is my favorite), and hip-hop's tagging bricks of yesteryear! Good luck and write on. One.
Dez
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Sometimes it's scary to see the writing on the wall... wonderfully well written! BRAVO!
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"if life imitates art
what is grafitti
if it isn't the writing on the wall?"
Deep and meaningful!
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OH I like. Although do not understand. But that's what I like. I like when things become unundersatandable and I try and my head hurts. and yeah. I like it anyways. Even I don't understand.
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