darkness
filling the night
crickets
A contest entry
- Haiku Workshop by azure85.
600 points, ended July 24, 2008, 60 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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pivotal
A wonderful us of the pivotal second line and a merging of the two senses - sight and sound. Crafted in an evocative minamilist way and with a great sense of rhythm! This is a wonderful haiku to read on the page and also to read out loud! very smooth and well-crafted!
best wishes in the contest; your haiku work is very powerful,
Myron.
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hehe
. Another wonderful 'ku filled with great soundagery . I, once again, think of my grandparent's farm; they had so many crickets that could be heard at night. I can visualize this clearly. g'luck!
~Pt
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Crisp, clear contemporary 'ku - darkness and nothing else and then the pivot line to bring us into the sound. No overblown descriptions here, just an awareness that the reader will fill their head with the image, in just eight syllables. Stylish
Alan
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darkness
filling the night
crickets
Oh, a nice contrast between sight and sound, and the crickets do love t hat darkness so. A nice summer evening haiku, thank you so much.
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A haiku of sounds...nice one. a modern type haiku here..All the best!
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Mmmmmm. I hear this. Nice.
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Thank you - I thought I'd hear from you on this one - those crickets were really LOUD last night.
Marlene
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