warm summer wind
roaming all through the house
sigh after sigh
A contest entry
- Haiku Workshop by azure85.
600 points, ended July 24, 2008, 60 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I like Tishu's suggestions very much (I just read his astute and thoughtful comments.)
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Ah yes, such a wonderful aha moment in the final line. In one reading I hear the wind sighing through the house and in another reading i see humans sighing at the heat.
Great stuff!
Myron.
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OH! this is cool. A very cool 'ku.
I like the auditory imagery it creates
Another excellent and clean haiku! g'luck!
~Pt
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Hi marlene I really like this - it stands up well with a second line pivot.
Two small nits, summer wind would be 'warm' - so perhaps surplus, as is 'all' in the second line.
A nice haiku
Alan
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warm summer wind
roaming all through the house
sigh after sigh
I like the thoughts of this one, your L3 is very cool. Thank you so much.
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sigh..beautiful...
All the best in the contest!
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