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Musical Misadventure

I'm half alive with pain inscribed on my face
that face in the mirror that beckons rapture
beckons the love of language
this world weaving a web of lies and codes
only the mad and insane understand this place
teen angst ramming the cage of my heart
listening to the subtle messages
sarcasm thick on thier tongues

these delacate balance of words and feelings

these homesick lovers fall to the pen and flourish

a sense of emptyness fills the room of strangers

dancing together in a crazed frenzy

making music with thier hearts

these thoughts that brethe and words that burn 

glorious calamities and loving tempests

ravaging for what they need

water is not thick enough for these thieves

 

 

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  • Luckintheshadows
    July 17, 2008

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    A really superb write! I love the artistry of your words...your imagery is beautifully defined.
    Thanks for sharing this, and taking the time to enter my contest,
    Luck.


  • CrimsonLips
    July 12, 2008
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    Great use of words

    Excellent vocabulary, but there are a lot of spelling mistakes - try to use spell check next time! I really liked the last line, I immediately saw blood. I found some of the poem to be a little too cryptic, it was difficult to understand exactly what story you were trying to convey.