Sustain me with moonlight
keeping snug the binds of reverie,
protect my dreams aloft the sky
in radiance of perpetual wonder.
Hold euphoria by the hand
as it prays upon my heart,
Quietly,in spiritual essence
I surrender to celestial bliss.
Tenderly, divinity clutches me
laced sweetly in evening air,
I feel nightfall kiss the heavens
and in unison,
we sigh.
Author notes
Moon Of The Night II by manips-of-artist2
A contest entry
- Pretty Picture Prompt # 1 by kiwigirljacks.
600 points, ended July 13, 2008, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Ah how sweet!
Such beautiful free verse...something I don't do well.
Good job!
Congrats on your win!
Regards,
Jennifer
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Thank you. I started out with only rhyme when I came to this site. But I tried it this way and now I can't seem to rhyme worth a darn anymore. lol I appreciate your kind comment.
Linda
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Your poetry touches the heart.
Congrats.You begin carry forward and end your thought so well that one really has no time to speculate.
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Aww thank you dear, I appreciate the kind words.
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Sigh indeed! A very beautiful write.. I like the thought of being snug in binds of reverie.. especially as she does look so comfortable on the moon in the picture!
Gave me such a peaceful feeling... lovely!!
(I think phantasy is refering to the double space after the comma, rather than the comma itself.. but it makes no difference to me
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Thank you for bronze dear, and I meant no harm at all about the comma or space incident...I truly appreciated the help. It's hard to get tone of voice across via words on a screen. I hope I haven't offended anyone. And the double space, I see that now
I shall fix it. Thanks!
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I don't think anything you said would offend anyone hun! I was just trying to clear the confusion lol..
You're welcome.. thank you for continuing to pen my beautiful writes!
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Celestial bliss is a blissful sounding phrase...just rolls off your tongue like melting cotton candy!!
"Sustain me with moonlight"
Wonderfully poetic...love the verb use of 'sustain'.
"binds of reverie"
Love this!!
"Hold euphoria by the hand"
If only I could sample euphoria..
"Quietly,"
There seems to be an unneeded additional space after this word...you should probably fix that.
"nightfall kiss the heavens"
Nice contrast.
"we sigh."
Good separation and measured effect here...
Good luck (:
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I appreciate your advice, but I put the comma after Quietly for my own personal reason, the way I wanted it to pause. I don't claim to be a poet by ANY stretch of the imagination, I do however, simply write for the pure enjoyment of it. My form is my own,if one can even call it that, simple and basic, just like me! Thank you for your lovely comment. I do appreciate it.
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This is a pretty poem. Great job.
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Thanks Chucky It's that peaceful easy feeling I have this weekend (so far) hehe
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Excellent
Aww, this is so beautiful. A great take on the picture. Best of luck in the contest
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Quite the compliment coming from you Thank you dear friend.
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"we sigh" - a perfect ending to a beautiful write.
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Thanks! Your comment is touching, thank you.
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