In dreams I see this sleeping beauty's face
Through dawn her image plagues my fitful sleep
In quiet coma lies a belle of grace,
her shining light is caught in web so deep.
A princess who invades my life in ways
that I will seek to change as she can haunt
my lonely thoughts through the end of my days.
With greatest love her dreams begin to taunt,
this prince's romantic life, I feel the pain
of knowing the vision, but grasping void,
for hands can never hope to thus regain
the dream that I have so daily enjoyed.
Tomorrow, knight of white, yes, I shall ride
to seek a kiss from lips of princess bride
A contest entry
- Love poems, Letters, etc. by SaviDropKick.Oi..
375 points, ended July 14, 2008, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pre-Write Extravaganza 3/ rhyme only by piccola.
600 points, ended October 12, 2008, 25 entries
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very nice work every line flows just as it should i love this work keep it up and dont stop the great writing.
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beautiful
oh this is so good, poet. the rhyme is smooth and graceful and the picture it paints of the knight is so stirring and beautiful. . .I love poems about knights. . .splendidly done!
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Wow, what a beautiful tale you have told! The imagery your words paint is wonderful and the emotions so tender, a stunning sonnet! I love the theme, something I used to day dream about, a knight in shining armour...still waiting..lol. Superbly penned!
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Smooth
Surely a piece of poetry to capture a maidens heart. And the reader so enjoy the words of a true poet.
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so sweet!
i really enjoyed every line so sweet and touching
it made me smile! great job my friend.
juliet
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wow, amazing
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Very Sweet
That is a sweet and very romantic piece. I had to sneak a peak at some of your work and really have to say I'm very impressed. Your writting is eloquent and heart felt.
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Wow
What an excellent sonnet you have penned yourself poet. Proud of this you must! Bravo, and keep going, and going, and going! lol, gotta love that rabbit! 
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Thanks!
Anybody who writes that well of one of my works is worth a peek! I'll be right over to see your stuff.
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this is beautiful. I see the couplet at the end and so supposing it was a sonnet, I went back for the tedious syllable count and found that some of the lines were off so the iam is kind of tossed out the window. Still beautiful however and you didn't say it was a sonnet that was all my idea
thank you for the beautiful entry.
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Wonderful imagery. The sweet little dream is made more vivid and 'real' by the underlying frustration from the 8th line. It's as if it's a sign of 'void' in the 'prince's' life, which he must fill. In this way it's a romantically motivational piece.
Nice rhymes, also.
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This is beautiful "Tomorrow, knight of white, yes, I shall rid to seek a kiss from lips of princess bride" I love that line. Your poetic ability is outstanding.
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tender layers...lovely...
unfolding the poetic beauty slowly..
so we can breathe and enjoy every breath
of this well written poem!
We salute YOU!
flamesdragoness
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Love the flow of this and some wonderful words you have woven together. Very clever title too A beautifully sad tale of lost love. A wonderfully emotional write
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Sleepless Knights! Very intriguing, this has a touch of the alchemical wedding about it. Maybe an animus/anima union. Many people think the whole sleeping beauty story is about exactly this. Or is it just a Jungian slip?
Very Good.
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I loved your take, so much,
that I changed the title to 'Sleepless Knights'. Thanks for the heads up on that idea. It was done for a teenage judge whose psuedonym is sleeping beauty
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Nice write dear poet.
Never stop dreaming.
Antonio
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"Through dawn her image plagues my fitful sleep
In quiet coma lies one of gentle grace,
her beauteous light that's caught in web so deep."
nicely written and i enjoyed the flow and this image it gave me
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Wow! this is a very excellent write for our Fantasy world group...speaking of a Knight and a Princess; plus
love and so much imagery...Great choice thanks for sharing this one with all of us....
novy
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This is just beautiful...such a tendr loving feel to it and the flow is perfect. You'll have me sighing soon LOL!!! Good luck hon with this
Love ~sweetness~ xx
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awwww i absolutely love this!!! thank so much! and it was worth the wait!
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