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Wishing and Hoping

Schoolyard looks,              defeated
eyes stare at the                unmoving
sidewalk wishing
for it to fade away
into the                              dark
sky above.
New chances
and second                      glances,
over again,
still the same hope
that is                                sinking
into the cracks
in the ground.
Same                                  voices
different stories
of the weird things
of yesterday.
Same steps                        through
the silence
of the mind
and noises
of the                                  air.
Where to go
from here?
This                                    hoping
whisper
keeps coming,
from the                            wish
of what                              never
could be.

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    July 13, 2008

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    Very sad, though I can somewhat relate, though obviously every situation is different . Better times huh and to learning.