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gypsy zombie

i was tempted by a lone star

glittering in the southern sky

it slashed the velvet of a cloud swept night

... reminding me of my father's eyes

i almost made a wish

instead laughed until i cried

 

why bother...why?

 

all hope gutted

i've been resurrected into a living hell

i'm a zombie 

cursed to wander where i dwell

in the graveyards of my life

 

rode boxcars through the desert

all the way to Mexico

nowhere bound and shivering

no special place to go...

 

dreamt of you again ya know...

 

those soft warm hands

your cold, cold heart

the one that blew my world apart

i should've known

your insides were made of stone

 

i am a gypsy

cursed to roam

a gypsy zombie without a home

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  • LittleDecoy
    August 14, 2008

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    i love this!
    it was wonderful.
    i love the subtle rhyming of it- it wasn't too overwhelmingly similar with sounds.
    great job!! thanks so much for entering my contest.
    & good luck!


  • mcrfan322
    July 14, 2008
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    dude this was amazing... the style,, the fraising, just the way it all fits together... 9/10


    • malkinpuss
      July 14, 2008
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      mcrfan

      all i can say is...man, one cool compliment. ya made my day.

      Thanks!


  • anguish
    July 14, 2008
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    Nice. i like it. very different but in a good way. good luck


  • CrimsonLips
    July 12, 2008

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    Incredible

    This had me spell-bound start to end. I loved every minute of it. This poem has great potential to be a song as well, very rhythmic.

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