Abandonment glares from corners of grief,
where sorrow embraces a darker shade;
life's duvet's turned over - this bed is made
and the cobwebs all cry in disbelief.
Trapped with the horrors of being alone
against this mattress of desperation,
as tragedy rules this situation
in a world where vultures pick at lost bones.
Clouded emotions are dripping with pain,
with hurts always hidden by dreaded doubts
till silence seeps and soul wishes to shout,
but reality rules love with its stains.
Concealed in squalor as mind falls apart,
as truth dares fate to bathe in its defeat;
regret covers all shame with soiled sheets,
as derelict depths deprive broken heart.
Spite steals happiness to smother its sight,
to ennoble this torturous finish
and old sighs of hope fade now...diminish,
as Death holds up his two hands to the light.
Author notes
abba - Envelope Rhyme
A contest entry
- Rhyme. Bring in your masterpieces! by Never Fall in Love.
1300 points, ended July 27, 23 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Beautiful, really stunning. I like this a lot. This is a very powerful poem. A dark write, but its compelling. Congratulations on the trophy, I'm surprised it didn't do better than honorable mention. Thanks for entering my contest and sharing this with me.
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You paint desperation and hopelessness, with imagery that is too surreal, and for all to see. It lays bare the emotions that lay so deeply buried, and gives us, the readers of a glimpse behind closed doors, and what it is like when we are all alone with our pain and our feelings. It raises our own questions of self discernment, and reminds us that we all wear our own masks outside to the world in which we dwell. Very well written and depicted.
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Very much touching and very much open as the truth of this bitter life you have sketched here my friend....I love this thoughtful work...well done and my thanks for sharing it with me....
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Love is, after all, a liquid.
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Reality poetry
Hello..I am amazed at the depth of this poem..you are bringing in subjects which world in general dint want to see or acknowledge...very good work indeed.
Rahbar.
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This is very sad I do hope that you feel better kinda fits my mood I just suddenly felt deppressed so the poem was perfect.
but reality rules love with its stains
this line stood out to me I guess because I have compared love and reality in my own poetry. Sometimes the heart gets ahead of itself and reality rules nice wording. There is someone for everyone. I hope you feel better. Great job on this piece. -
Oh the flip side of love
We sing the song of peace yet gun fire rings out in the nit and their are no more children playing and laughing for they fear the predetors thats right .The young today do enticed with drugs for its what theri parents displayed each day and we shall all look in disbeliefe as such a quiet is displayed .Oh to let evil ruke and to ignore love is a true death to us all
. Rewarded 8
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"I'll never fall in again...
What do you get when you fall in love...a guy with a pin to burst your bubble...that's what you get for all your trouble..."
Great write!
Regards,
Degraw
. Rewarded 4
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Its a hauntingly sad, beautifully written piece. Bravo!
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This is amazing, you portray despair in such detail! I had to read it over a few times to fully get the flavor. Just an amazing job.
. Rewarded 4
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