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The Dance of the Cereal

Crackily, snappily pops in my bowl
The noisiest breakfast makes me complete
A cereal’s dance that loses control
Crackily, snappily pops in my bowl
Just sprinkle some sugar and make it sweet
Crackily, snappily pops in my bowl
The noisiest breakfast makes me complete

The dance of the cereal wakes me up
With a gyrating mumbo in my mouth
I laugh so hard that I drool in my cup
The dance of the cereal wakes me up
They jiggle to the East and to the South
The dance of the cereal wakes me up
With a gyrating mumbo in my mouth

Crackily, snappily pops in my bowl
The dance of the cereal wakes me up
It makes me a winner and reach my goal
Crackily, snappily pops in my bowl
I'm feeling frisky just like a cute pup
Crackily, snappily pops in my bowl
The dance of the cereal wakes me up

 

 



 

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Triolet:

A Triolet is a poetic form consisting of only 8 lines. Within a Triolet, the 1st, 4th, and 7th lines repeat, and the 2nd and 8th lines do as well. The rhyme scheme is simple: ABaAabAB, capital letters representing the repeated lines.

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  • sailor ptolema
    July 23, 2008

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    This is cute Amera . Thank you for writing about the cereal in an original way! I like the form; and I felt this poem was giving off onomatopoeia, and I could hear their snaps..etc lol ; despite the fact that I'm eating them

    thank you for entering this sweet and morning-friendly poem!

    -sailor ptolema


  • Fourthaxis
    July 17, 2008

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    Awesome....I am all for form poems!! (cant write them myselves except haiku's ) But this is great...
    though there are only 7 lines


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    July 14, 2008

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    Clever Amera, a nice little ditty I believe anyone would enjoy reading over...whatever it is that they eat...in a bowl...you rock! LOL! Best of luck in the contest hun.


    Love and peace always,
    mj


  • Faeryn
    July 14, 2008

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    This is excellent! I love it! So cute and funny! Now I want food....
    Ok, how can you write three triolets? You make this impossibly hard form seem easy! *is envious* Good luck in the contest.
    Love,
    Tay


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 13, 2008

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    Wahoo... I feel like after reading that!!

    Oh what fun!! I know SP is gonna enjoy this!!!




  • Desire gold member
    July 13, 2008

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    OMG~


    Excellent Beautiful and Love the words: gyrating mumbo

    Gosh now I am hungry
    -tackles Fruit Loops-

    You are Amazing!!
    Keep that quill dancing Form Queen
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • k.a.s.s.i.e
    July 13, 2008

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    this is really cute! it made me giggle in a weird, psycho kind of way (cereal makes me laugh, and this is a great way to make cereal even more funny!)
    whoo hoo!!!!!!

    ~kassie

    (loved the rhyme scheme, once again! there are so many ways to rhyme that i've never heard of!)


  • Melodies
    July 12, 2008

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    I have arrived to whisk your adorable poem away to Poetry Planet. Thank you ever so much, Amera. You are kind to share your talent.


  • echo-ink
    July 12, 2008

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    I personally love rice krispies, this was so cute and funny too. hehehe

    Good luck in the contest Amera, not that you need any, your form poetry is always a sweet treat, pun intended. hehehehave three bunnies for your
    tri-olet!!! *S*


  • Li snuffles
    July 12, 2008

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    This could be a commercial for cereal, GET AN AGENT BEFORE YOU GET SWAMPED...!

    I really enjoyed this piece, Triolet,eh?


    sounded really good...xxx


  • PerVirtuous
    July 12, 2008

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    What a way to start your day!

    "I say it's Crackle, the crispy sound/ You gotta have Crackle or the clock's not wound/ Geese cackle, feathers tickle, belts buckle, beets pickle, but Crackle makes the world go round."

    How's that for a gaggle of slant rhymes? Ha ha ha. This is so cute. Have some bunnies.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    July 12, 2008

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    Poppily perfect
    Crackily crazy
    and
    Snappily something starting with s

    Great stuff


  • Melodies
    July 12, 2008
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    Charmed, most surely. I am doing three curtsies in honor of this poem because cereal is one of the most important food groups and I LOVE CEREAL! But, better than that, I love your poem! Your Triolet has pleased me greatly. May I please post it on Poetry Planet, which is the poetry blog I run for The Reporter newspaper?


    • Amera gold member
      July 12, 2008
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      Of coarse you can. Thank you so much


  • Decorus Somnium
    July 12, 2008

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    This is so good! Very creative PLUS I like that it's written in triolet. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
    Keep writing

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