Perfectly presented by Cupid,
Straight out of Heaven's sky.
I was dazzled by your presence-
Looking back, I wonder why.
Armed with your bow and arrow.
Piercing shots explode in my chest.
Now broken shards rip right into my soul
As they tear away all of my best...
In a list
A contest entry
- Now You Make Me Blush, Won gold in comp from Penman and am passing it on, winner please PIF 300 points by Topaze.
450 points, ended August 12, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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A lovely piece, well written, thank you for your fine entry in this contest.
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i love the title,lolz ofcourse the lines too. short poems are really nice and not tiring to read^_^ great job
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this wasn't bad..
the rhyming wasn't forced which was a plus,
but i didn't really feel the emotion much.
it seems like you just put everything out there bluntly instead of making the audience feel what you were feeling. -
Nice Rhyme ... and great flow... just the way I like em... Your friend in Poetry.... Jack Reed3////
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this is short and i usually like longer stuff but this was fantastic. i really liked it. the rhyming was also really well done.
Armed with your bow and arrow.
Piercing shots explode in my chest.
Now broken shards rip right into my soul
As they tear away all of my best...
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that part really hit me. nicely written and very emotional
thanks and goodluck
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