I took a nap during a weary day
and dreamed my sister was a deadly snake.
I rooted in place, couldn't get away,
it seemed so real I thought I was awake.
In the mid-summer heat I stared amazed,
under the tree where we played as children.
We were castaway kids in a home crazed
by our mother's mad struggles, made barren.
So sister, I know where you're coming from.
While with you then, I stand against you now
and I mourn the crimes that are your custom.
I'll sadly see that you reap, just what you sow.
I do not profit from accusation
I pray this lesson leads to redemption.
Author notes
The English (or Shakespearian) Sonnet:challenge
The English sonnet has the simplest and most flexible pattern of all sonnets, consisting of 3 quatrains of alternating rhyme and a couplet:
a b a b
c d c d
e f e f
g g
Each line has ten syllables.
Each quatrain develops a specific idea, but one closely related to the ideas in the other quatrains.
Not only is the English sonnet the easiest in terms of its rhyme scheme, calling for only pairs of rhyming words rather than groups of 4, but it is the most flexible in terms of the placement of the volta. Shakespeare often places the "turn," as in the Italian, at L9:
A volta is where the story takes a turn or changes. Many times in classical sonnets it started with the word “yet”.
whatever you feel is right
Comments
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Now this is real poetry, I’m so impressed, it has flow, image and tells a story. You have a very good volta at L9 and the ending couplet is wonderful. You are a true sonneteer. Bravo!
Love,
Amera
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Thank you so much Amera
I'm blessed by you my patient and kind teacher. I'm so glad that you once again liked my first effort. I owe much to you.
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This is a very nice sonnet. Welcome to the sonnett writer's club. Stay long and write often, you're one of the gang now.
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Really, thank you
I appreciate your comment and appreciate that you liked my sonnet. I hope to learn much more about sonnets and grow in poetic sense.
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