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Insistently, always, before and after, the blood of red flowers

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 Image from contest holder's page by enrique:An abstract..

 

They unfold where bells ring, mothers point, fathers salute,

superlatives babble, ticker-tape showers explode, paparazzi

struggle, then blitz ... all for the honored ones, cultivated by an era.

 

Blooms aerate airs of spring, burst in summer, nod their heads

through gardens of indulgence and wither

to a red pulse of autumnal blood.

 

Tides at the full, with moon as trigger, slide inexorably back.

Shoals from the drowned great groan from their silence,

each a defiant minion of their age.

 

Who sang for Mozart in crystal, clear voice?

What requiem resounded from choir stalls to nave as he slid

quietly in shade, frozen as ice, from death-cart to communal grave?

 

Tomorrow will flick heroes by,

replace them metronomically or if not,

dynamite their effigies, with conflict in the social weather.

 

Do the favored ones know that? Ah! Red blood of youth: how it pales!

Winter rains eradicate color;

drops dribble down grey stems of flowers. 

 

Watch! For the sun is quenched by the ocean.

The moon's quiet honor is routinely bitten into;

high breezes bend rainbows.

 

Fired stars pause in luster, bleached by cloud. 

As from a fireball, cruel fates

detonate overhead.

 

Heroes leave faint shadows

on a far pavement

downtown from fame.  

 

If not dimmed by quaint legends,

stars of exalted ones spark

then set to their own deepness.

 

Look! The gardens are featureless.

Winter has come:  Flowers no longer are radiant,

effulgent; hoar-frosts efface and decimate.

 

Extinction lies veiled hours by hours, before and after,

foreordained, sniffs leaf mold

and worms reach out, radial and efficient, actuate there,

 

the wilting of red flowers. 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

I used all twenty words from the word bank and they are in plainer type. It is hoped they do not distract too much from the poem. Image is from the contest holder.

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  • Polaja Greeters member
    July 30, 2008
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    Hood-Winked!

    This is a stunning poem! I really love the way that you have created such beautiful imagery and it is simply a joy to read I'm glad that you were chosen to be Hood-Winked today and I hope you enjoy it - there is amazing effort in this piece!

    Keep writing

    Polly


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    July 30, 2008

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    Wow. You have certainly blended all of the words from this word bank into your poem.

    Not so certain about your title but I understand it. I think shorter might be better if that is possible. I found myself moving from parades and honoring those military men who protect and serve, to graceful gardens of life that mingle and grow and bloom. And still you carry the them throughout, those who have served and died. The transitions were a little tough but that has to do with the outrageous work bank I gave you.

    I liked this very much. Thank you for a fine entry and best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela


  • Age of Rain
    July 27, 2008

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    *laughs* I really enjoyed 'superlative babble.' It reads like an oxymoron to me, though it technically isn't. 'Ticker-tape showers' really great imagery in that line! 'Autumnal' I have always been fond of that word. A much more poetic way to express 'Fall' in my opinion. 'Flick heroes' I love the reverse nature of this phrasing. Tomorrow takes the action instead of the heroes. You brought your prompt to a whole different level. This was gorgeous.


  • tigerteach
    July 15, 2008

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    Such beautiful command of language you possess, your words paint a masterpiece of lyrics.... also, love the use of onomatopoeia


  • paperparadox silver member
    July 15, 2008

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    What a lovely rich blend of imagery you have conjured from the wordbank. I can almost smell the compost!

    Bravo, dear Poet, and best of luck in this contest.


  • Oleander
    July 12, 2008
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    Nice poem. I really liked the imagery.

    Keep Writing~

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