We chill from the plight
of our inherited apartheid,
knowing full well our fate
As you scurry with your
weapons of indifference
to keep us chained,
like monkey's in a cage
I am my brothers keeper
We will survive the storm
Truth and righteousness
mandates our much sought
after liberties
So we recline in contentment
with hearts cloned to relief,
until the other side of midnight
appears and we stand again
as full men in a world of beast
Author notes
This poem is a dedication to Africa and all
people who strive everyday for freedom.
Picture for poem inspiration found on link below.
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2413669
A contest entry
- Free-Write by polly filla.
1750 points, ended August 12, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I liked the wordplay within the title and the title compounds the intent/content of the poem. NB scury /scurry. The last line " as full men in a world of beast" may possibly work instead for me personally as in a world full of beasts or full of bestiality or even in a beastly world, not a criticism per se but a perspective shared dear poet. I liked " until the other side of midnight" very much, it compounded the depth ,length and breadth of the darkness.
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again, I think this is good
"weapons of indifference"...neat; and
"I am my brothers keeper
We will survive the storm"
seems like a direct link to the image included in the contest: eye to eye, empathic. I'm impressed about how you've managed to open up such a strong connection with such a frugal phrase
in saying all this, I'm overlooking your presentation. It could be better, with spelling and punctuation
by better, I mean, people might pay better attention to your talents if they believe in your cleverness, and for that, most assume...by making things like spelling & punctuation a top priority
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Wow.
This was very deep baby. It is a struggle for mankind more now than ever before, you'd think by now FREEDOM will be open to everyone. This was very powerful as your thoughts have become a Reality in Life. Great job and always the best
I am so proud & Blessed to have you as my friend, Forever 
-KaPricia
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Amen!!!!!!!!!!!
A very good piece here Darell... This can speak of all who are afflicted by slavery and human trafficing...etc...But the Nations of Arica have been enslaved and the loss of life is profound alot of from radical Muslims who slaughter all who lift up the name of Jesus especially. My church ahs fred over 35,000 slaves in the Sudan through out breakthough ministry called bridge of hope....Read my Poem called "A Cry For Innocnence" it is about human traffciing of children and the way children are just an after though in todays world..Thanks for sharing htis piece with me today....I LOVED IT!!!!!~~Toni~~
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yes hon yes! loved it as we are in a world compressed and chained by the paticular hateful flesh species and I will hold the rest. good luck in the contest *rose
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good effort, in an instant!
I'll come back to give you more of what I think after reading this, when I've read it more in-depth
ps; like the word "mandates", and how you've used it
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Excellent
A very creative and powerful poem on a very serious problem. So very well done. Thank you for sharing, best of luck in the contest.
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t'wou'd be good if you entered, penman...not to steal this thunder, but to add to the caucophany
pleeze?
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oh, I love Africa. I try to help in my ways.
Loved this poem but am confused what place these two lines have in the poem:"I am my brothers keeper
We will survive the storm."
I love how they read, just don't understand their place.
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