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Her Jar

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She ties the soul

with ageless silver threads of moonbeam glow,

pouring out satin beams of lucid dreams

from her star sprite's enchanted jar.

 

It flowed so freely

first into ancient rivers

as the light of hope and love,

tasted by the spirits

born of Atlantis hearth,

turning to a flood of tears

when its waters churned a brew

of arrogance's wine,

as hearts became drunk

in their own delusions of divinity.

 

The Gods pouring out their own purging wrath,

while she wept over her creation,

being Mother Nature her first passion,

never losing a parent's care for all her offspring.

 

Silently, still filling the night

by all the spellbound charm of belief

that her ethereal fingers can infused,

for nothing can keep her from wanting

eyes of her children

able to see more magic than darkness

in their lives and the worlds

where the mind travels beyond any doors.

Author notes

Please credit the artist: Moon Of The Night II by manips-of-artist2

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  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 13, 2008

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    Such a beautiful tale you have penned for this picture! I love how you have seen her in this and the imagery and mystical feel of the write is excellent!


  • notorious gold member
    July 12, 2008

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    How deeply eloquent and metaphorical (like always!! )

    "She ties the soul"
    Love this opening line already...mostly 'cause of the use of the word 'ties'.

    "ageless silver threads"
    Love that those threads are ageless.

    "born of Atlantis hearth"
    Great visuals.

    "arrogance's wine"
    LoL!! Drunk people can express quite a lot of boldness. =D

    "travels beyond any doors."
    Very cool ending...leaves intrigue.

    Good luck (:


  • Carolina Moon gold member
    July 12, 2008

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    I'm not a bit surprised your write is brilliant. I entered this one as well because the pic is awesome..you have brought it to life!!! Well done my friend.

  • chiefmac
    July 12, 2008

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    What a marvelous work. I too will participate in this contest, but, this work offers a great deal of fantasy and love. The reader on a lovely trip of the sky, magic, and images from the heavens. The last stanza holds the reader captivated as children are given one more chance. Great finish. Good luck in the contest.