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The Unseen Soul

I thought he saw what was within
But he could not see beyond my skin.
And thus is it was we could not be,
For my flesh makes up the least of me!

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  • Maldronah
    September 8, 2008

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    I smiled, knowing that she could not see,
    for if she had I fear she would not bide,
    the sharp incisors that my kind possess,
    the proof of love that we must always hide.


    • Frodofan silver member
      September 8, 2008
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      If only that were the way it was. Always appreciate a good poetic response. Thank you!


  • dame de la riviere
    July 13, 2008

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    nice work...you got a lot into a few words....that shows a great deal of skill.


  • TyrannyForestFairy
    July 12, 2008

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    Simple and brief poem that is yet deep in meaning. Beautiful work with the ryhme and the terms within in perfect harmony


  • Lone Defender
    July 12, 2008

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    It's certainly a pretty skin, but I imagine that what's beneath trumps it. Good job!


  • wildfiredreamer
    July 12, 2008

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    wow
    I really really love this
    so short so simple yet so powerful
    Thanks for blowing me away this morning

  • darrylblacksr
    July 12, 2008
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    Interesting, thanks for joining the contest and good luck to you...

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