The silhouette of limber branches sway
yet standing still, the night air breathes no more,
for under shelter’s safety I must stay
inhaling dreams I’ve never dreamt before.
When visions of the one I long to hold
are focused on the joy that truth is near,
then pointed past, which left me in the cold
now warms tomorrows, knowing he’s sincere.
His hand extends from billowed clouds in flight
enticing me to step out from the shade,
while echo sings to show my love’s true light.
Entranced, I twirl to dewdrop’s serenade.
With wondrous movement ever shall I dance,
held in the arms of one who took the chance.
From underneath the canopy of leaves,
(where hidden I remained until he came)
the colored threads of trust he slowly weaves
now pull me closer, as he calls my name.
The gentle breezes smile upon his face,
as water sprinkles down to bring new life.
Through teary eyes, in him I find the place
where love remains and peace replaces strife.
As dawn awakens, sunlight filters through
caressing buds, allowing love to grow,
while silently, the painted skies he drew
become hope’s cover, perfect in the glow.
Beneath blue heaven’s roof of grand design,
the willow weeps delight, as hearts entwine.
A contest entry
- Poetic Forms - Sonnet by Intwine.
675 points, ended August 1, 15 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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How beautiful and romantic...you did such a wonderful job one this one (not that it suprises me)...you captured a moment in time and painted a picture of love with your words...perfect flow and imagery...
Best to you...
Love always,
mom
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Unbelievable. You need to be published.
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this definitely owns my sonnet... by one full stanza of awesomeness.
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Outstanding
This is sooooo beautiful! I loved this. You have written with such elegance and the imagery is stunning. Well done with this; one of your best for me.
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many expressions remain with the reader while love glows thro' the painted skies and dewdrops....
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Absolutely Beautiful and romantic, flowed beautifully, I feel like I fell in love as I read it. So many brilliant lines it's really difficult to pick out the ones I loved the best... line four is definitely a favourite, as is 25-26 and of course the final line. Good luck xx
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This was a beautiful poem. I could never make something rhyme like you did and make it sound as good as you did. You had my admiration! Great job!
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thank you
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gorgeous soul
You are so outrageously wonderful
in the incredible way you write
I'm totally amazed everytime
I witness displays of your beautiful mind.
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oh my....... thats gorgeous...........
that whole thing where i said you are amazing? yeah, i take that back. amazing doesnt even begin to describe you
=D GREAT GREAT GREAT poem
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wow... thank you
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Way of words...
Was just listening to the song Entwined by Lacuna Coil, so when I saw it as the title of your next piece....well it just seemed serendipitous. So on to the words... Well of course they are beautiful and tell of the longing in your heart for another. Replace all the "he's" with "she's" and I would have loved to had been the author. I wish to use the word clean when describing this poem and pretty much all of your others as well. Not in a sterile way, but sort of the feeling you get after cleaning something and smelling the freshness....if you sort of get it. Anyways, just to have read it has made my day a little better....
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how could i ask for anything more from someone who comes to read my poems... THANK YOU for a beautiful comment and compliment.
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