she tangos with the moon
stars beneath her feet
dust upon her hair
she stands beautiful
as the glow
she welcomes thoughts
of days gone by
and hopes for them
to come true
with a simple wish
she then kisses
the awaiting
moon
Author notes
moon of the Night II by manips-of-artist2
A contest entry
- Pretty Picture Prompt # 1 by kiwigirljacks.
600 points, ended July 13, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I can picture a beatifully dressed dancer, twirling about in the sky. Awesome imagery and a beautiful write! Thanks so much for the share and I hope that you do great in the contest! Good luck with it! And thanks again for the share!
~*~*~*~*Heroesrox~*~*~*~*~
Oh, if you find the time, could you please read some of my work and tell me what you honestly think on it? Thanks so much!!!!!
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I haven't seen the picture for the contest... but I am picturing a girl who is happy beyond belief and who is dancing with the stars. This poem makes me smile.
Write on, poet.
Blessings,
Myth
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omg!!!!! this is so beautiful keep writing this gave me goosebumps i love all the metaphors you used very creative
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Beautiful writing!
I very much enjoyed reading this. Something about being out alone with the moon, it's like letting your guard down and being who you are. There are so many lies spoken to the sun throughout the day, and when the moon comes there is so much more openness. We dance, we cry, laugh, whatever is there from inside comes out.
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Very subtle and sweet with lovely images and a feeling of hope. I liked the pace you used and the great images you conjured up. Nicely done.
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This is a very very good write.
"She tangos with the moon
Stars beneath her feet"
That is my favourite part. This is a very beautiful write. Fantastic
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I like this!! Simple yet warming. Great addition!
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what a beauty you have with your soft and tender fulimmageies bringing the beauty of life in the every word of this wonderful piece..you are choosing the wonders of impressions in the words and touching the depth of your immageries..I love its flow and its impact which is speechless and which is just amazing..Its simplicty made this verse a magical one..I love it..and my thanks for sharing it with the readers..well done.....
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Pretty poem. Really hopeful. It was kind of distracting that each line was so spread out, but maybe that's how you wanted it. Overall, very nicely done. Cheers and good luck in the contest!
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Hmm, the simplicity of this peice makes it eerie. I like! Never stop writing!
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AAAHH!
So lovely and soulful!Dreamy!
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this is delicate and yet aggressive in a kind of sensual, thoughtful way. see, if you've ever watched or done the tango, you know that a kiss will follow the dance as a last act of sex and not the first act of sex, for the dance of the tango is a consummation of desire, or in this case, of thoughts of romance, perhaps,... yet, in the poem is moment of stillness at lines 3 through 8, this moment, like real time, is one of absolute stillness, yet there is the spaceof lines 2 and three, with the rapture of the finished dance of the tango, and then at the final three lines, the kiss, and the awaiting moon, !!!, this is very subtle and slick. I read this poem as a gorgeous little metaphore of sensual and physical adoration spiced with romance of the heartfelt kind.
very cool
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Ahh the wishing for the days that have gone by! Love that thought. The write was very lovely indeed for the picture! Thank you!
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I really enjoyed this poem. It brought me in, leaving me with a feeling of I can't wait for the next full moon for I will be out there dancing under it. Thank you for sharing. I really think that this was trophy material. Please keep writing & sharing. ~~Iridessa MoonFlower~~
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Lovely image you have here. Tango with the moon, sensual dance and the magical sight of the moon together...made me smile.
Mari
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Beautiful
This is really beautiful. It has an almost dreamlike quality, an etheral feel to your words. I really loved this and thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Thankyou for writing this poem and sharing its beauty with me. I hope it does well in the contest. I wish you all Good Luck. With all my very best wishes from Rose xx
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