As I was gazing at the sparkling lights
coming fourth from the heavenly night sky.
My eyes spotted a star that was not shining very bright,
I wonder if god forgot to brighten it tonight.
In wonder I stared at it, I saw the poor little star light go out and with in ten minutes a sharp white strike went across the night sky.
I ran down my steps and out the front door,
running into the forest I became breathless,
I wipe the perspiration from my brow,
and I sat down on a lump of dry grass.
I felt a tickle on my leg and look down, the little star was at the bottom of my feet.
I cry out in joy and wept for the little star,
I pick him up and brought him home so he can be my own little slice of heaven.
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I love this poem it was so innocent and cute..I really liked how you went threw different emotions but in the end it all turned out well.. correct me if im wrong but it kind of seems like you found and new love or at least someone you were in strong liking with..
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Aww hehe this was cute. I loved the ending
"I pick him up and brought him home so he can be my own little slice of heaven."
Very innocent and brings me back to childhood memories. This was a beautifully written poem!
Best of luck & thanks for entering
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Cute and still meaningful. It kind of reminds me of "Le Petit Prince", so innocent and yet very sad. Thank you for entering.
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Fantastic
OOOOHHH!!!! I loved this one.What an original idea.I love the thought of having a personal star to rake care of.Perhaps if we each had a star to care for the universe would be a much safer place, Ros
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I like the fantasy and metaphors incorporated into this poem along with the concept surrounding it and the background colour is lovely also. I love the last stanza most. Good work!
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Great/creative poem.
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