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Broken Angel

 

  Violet shades of violence

  shadow eyes of lost innocence

 

  A blossoming flower plucked

  by vile visions of others

 

  And cherub lips

  can no longer laugh with

  childish joy

 

  Pursed in pain

  that never should touch

  upon tender years

 

  An angel broken,

  left to languish

  in a world of hurtful fears

 

  And as I look at her

  with heavy heart

  I cry silent tears

 

 

 

 

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Prompt: Pic
http://egyptionrevelations.deviantart.com/art/Broken-Angel-91285086

(yes, this may be an obvious take on the picture.. but I had to write it, it comes from a deep part of me! And I dedicate this poem to all those who have suffered any form of abuse as a child... my heart goes out to you!)

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  • mysticstorm gold member
    July 19

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    With heavy heart and tears in my eyes I read your words of truth and sadness...what a wonderful dedication to all that have been in this horrible place in their lives...you took the picture to a deeper level and made it really mean something, for that alone it is Golden...
    Congrat's on a write that could be nothing but GOLD.
    Love to you, dear sweet heart
    sis


  • AngelWithDarkWings gold member
    July 18

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    I have read this poem more times since the contest closed.
    I came away each time trying to put my words together. this brought me to tears each time. this was written from your heart I can tell by your words alone. child abuse runs rampid in the world, it happens way too much.. our children should be protected from those that harm us/them. I suffered with emotional abuse as a child. I've known many friends who suffered physical and sexual abuse as children. it scars us forever. nightmares, no longer trusting anyone because of fear. I'm glad that you wrote this and placed this in my contest.

    with this poem you have the children who've been abused a voice. one that is needed many times over, and it needs to be loud and clear.

    thank you for this.. It touched my heart and very deeply too.

    kat
    good luck, though I don't think that its needed with this poem


  • innocence
    July 16
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    wow i love this poem keep up the good work if u want check out my poem holla

  • Valley Girl gold member
    July 15

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    Wow hun. Such a sad chilling write that has so much reality in it. It is so sick and twisted that poor innocent children go through this evil things. Thank you for sharing this with us. (hugs)


  • CinfullyDelicious
    July 14

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    oh so touching sis..i felt this

    and well you know...


    just wow, thnks for sharing*huG*


    Cind


  • crimsondew silver member
    July 14

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    This is so heart wrenching..all the more coz it is a harsh reality...I keep hoping and praying that children do not have to go through it...
    Excellent write dear!All the best in the contest!


  • Ravensdark
    July 13

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    Very pained imagery. It would take a cold, cold person not to be touched by this. The imagery you have chosen to use is poigant. Made me feel quite sad. Makes me want to go out and kick some scumbag arse. Excellent write.


  • stavykm gold member
    July 13

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    Oh Yes How I Know This Feeling

    You did a fabulous job on this pic!!! Your words are just so full of imagery with emotions that are down right heart wretching!

    And as I look at her
    with heavy heart
    I cry silent tears

    Me to, sis
    Much Love Always
    Kelle Marie


  • luna-midnight gold member
    July 12

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    wow, this is wickedly awesome, and wonderfully good, it hurts alot, it really hurts..*sigh* you know :/ lol
    but congrats on the wonderful poem andgood luck with the contest
    take care, stephanie


  • aboomer silver member
    July 12

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    Great depth and emotion! I especially like,
    'And cherub lips
    can no longer laugh with
    childish joy'
    ' And as I look at her
    with heavy heart
    I cry silent tears '
    Powerful!
    best wishes in your contest


  • arafura
    July 12
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    Disturbing and very emotive. How anyone can hurt a child is beyond my understanding. Brilliant!


  • phantasyintrigue-x silver member
    July 12

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    Lost innocence...think I lost mine when I was 6 (the age when I learned how babies were made by my older sister...anyways...)

    "Violet shades of violence"
    Associating purple with violence? My oh my...

    "shadow eyes"
    Oh I love this...it's creepy cool.

    "And cherub lips"
    Really gives you that angelic image.

    "childish joy"
    I love childish joy!!!

    As for your AN...well, I like to call all my abuse psychological (and occasionally physical with the Asian parent spanking--God, that hurt), but I think w/e you've gone through was probably a lot worse...and I'm the one complaining about my psychological trauma. =D Kudos to you for writing such a deep and thoughtful write with groovy wording.


  • liduen
    July 12
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    Such imagery you have penned! Great job and good luck in the contest!


  • Cerulean gold member
    July 12
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    Great job of expressing yourself.

  • aidenspektor
    July 12

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    Really well-written, I like this a lot. Teh structure/flow of the poem is great, and I like the ideas you present in the poem.


  • secberm
    July 12
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    Well done, poetess. Good luck and write on. One.

    Dez


  • Candy6
    July 12
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    beautiful


  • Lil-Bit Crazy silver member
    July 12

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    And as I look at her

    with heavy heart

    I cry silent tears


    me too this picture is very haunting to me.... thanks for sharing this lovely yet sad write... good luck in contst........! hugs mommy yes im awake again..

  • Jeremy0826 gold member
    July 12

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    So beautifully sad! You did a
    wonderful job bringing this picture
    to life with your words. Well done
    and I am sure that you will do well
    in this contest! Good luck to you
    and thanks a lot for sharing it here!




    Jeremy0826


  • crazymomma
    July 12

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    This is probable the most powerful write I have read of yours. While it is an obvious take on the pic it is a message too many know personally. An excellent write. I think one of your best. it seemed so emotional as if personal to you. Wonderful!


  • poppa silver member
    July 12

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    Beautiful write hun ... love the emotion and feeling within this wrtie....really really enjoyed it...good luck


  • SweetXDestiny silver member
    July 12
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    i love you auntie
    although this is sad its so beautifuly written
  • x-Black-Butterfly-x silver member
    July 12

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    child abuse, the thing that ruins my dreams at night with the memories. a pain felt write that captures my heart. love you auntie

  • azlyn gold member
    July 12

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    So heart breaking Sis...so very sadly true. Wonderful write.

    Blessed Be Sis~


  • Carolina Moon silver member
    July 12

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    Obvious take or not my friend, it is a sad but stunning piece of poetry..I couldn't agree with you more as even the mere thought of a child being hurt brings tears to my eyes, and one reason I find it so hard to write on this topic. All the best to you my friend.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    July 12

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    Superbly put, heartwrenching to read. Terrible that such things can happen, and to those so innocent. My heart goes out to them all. Superbly penned, I hope many read. Good luck


  • Sailor Ptolema gold member
    July 12

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    Oh my! How terribly sad! I love that you bring such humanity to this 'otherworldly' photo! A child, being exposed to unspeakable terrors....A great message..! I love it!

    ~g'luck in the contest~

    ~Pt


  • Cannonsfire silver member
    July 12

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    Written with a powerful message for the stain on all children who suffer this terrible event. z Love, C


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    July 12

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    A somber bit of truth that touches my heart, and I'm sure, will touch others deeply as well. All the best in the contest Jacks.


    Love and peace always,
    mj.


  • Angelflower Greeters member
    July 12

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    wow sissy.. you did a wonderful job.. I really love this!! it' really sad and heartbreaking..There was just so much emotion in this write.. best of luck sissy..


    Angel
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