Abandoned
By those
Who created
Her life
Castaway
As if
She were
Made of
Fecies
Yet
Constructed into
Their slave
Touched
As if she was
An anesthetic
For their
Pain
Author notes
30 words
Artist:
http://pweetylucious.deviantart.com/art/left-alone-89967983
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A contest entry
- Dark/Sad quickie.. pic up.. you got 1 hour!! by kiwigirljacks.
600 points, ended July 12, 2008, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - #108 Turn silver to gold by daviscth.
300 points, ended July 14, 2008, 6 entries
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Be kinder than necessary, for everyone you meet is fighting some kind of battle!
Comments
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Wow, I really like the story behind this story.
A wonderful write and I wish you Wonderful ideas for the future.
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An awesome use of your word limit!!! Thanks for posting in my contest.
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Lots of unusual (but effective) similes employed here...e.g. "she were made of feces" LMAO, how sad...and wryly amusing for bad sinners like me.
"An anesthetic for their pain"
I love this simile...
Kudos on the Silver (: -
Very nice sweety it isso hard to live this life when you feel that thsoe who are to love you walk out on you when you need tehm the most take care and congrats on your trophy win
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I forgot the smiling reindeer.
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This is a great poem. I think it is good to express yourself. The ones who reject you are afraid of what you represent. Hold your head up high. You are not responsible for their failings.
They have eyes but they do not see. They are truly blind. -
this is an incredibly dark, and very powerfully sad poem.
people are so cruel & viscous to others, it just sickens me.
You did a superb job on expressing this..
good luck sissy
kat
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thank you.. for the lovely comment... hugs sissy
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A deep and powerful piece indeed. Such horrid people who do this, just nasty, no need for it really. You've expressed it superbly, good luck hun
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Oh so terribly sad! I think your last stanza holds so much depth of thought that it struck me with force!! I think people who do this sort of thing are trying to use another as an anesthetic for their pain! It's so vile and doesn't even work.. just so vicious!
A powerful piece of sadness here!
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thanks for understanding my meaning.... hugs
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Wow, I can for sure see this happening in the pic. Awesome job
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