What is it about your touch
that captivates me so?
Is it the way
that your arms
w
r
a
p
around me,
pulling me in
to something
I cannot control?
Sign my soul on the dotted line
and inhale, right?
I'm yours now.
CONSTRUCTIVE criticism is most welcome.
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Wowie!
Simplicity beyond! It was so beautifully penned, that I wanted to just be painted in that vivid picture!
Sign my soul on the dotted line
and inhale, right?
So much emotion and depth in those 2 lines. Excellent job!!!
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I really loved how you wrote this, especially the "wrap". The effect was totally awesome!!
"I'm yours now."
There's so much emotion hidden in these simple words, it is beautiful! I loved the ending!!
Great write, man! Keep up the good work!
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omg! fantastic!!!
how short and forward and words of life! i love it!
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I like this. I have been there before... I think it was lust for me... Nice write!
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i loved this...and the fact that it was short made it even more breathtaking...the whole time you had us like waiting for more...but you gave us more with less..if that makes sense lol
i totally loved the last 3lines of it all..lovely metaphors ^__^
Dani♥
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interesting...the allure of a bad after taste...
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this is amazing,
i love this!!! its just breath taking,
miss you, all my love,
kitty xx -
phenomenal write
It was a very appealing form.
Also, the rhyming was stunning.
Very simple,
short message,
but to the point.
Well done.
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NICE! i like the way you've creatively 'Wrapped' the arms! Nice effect
-Arooj-
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a good piece of poetry, ah love, it breathes us in as we breathe it in and we dance on the clouds of life with smiles.
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ooooooooooooo wow.... now this is awesome... i relly like this...... alot..... thank you for sharing this as its is true and so awesome....
. Rewarded 4
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Oh I love this. It's exactly the way I'm feeling right now. He is my one true addiction. Well done
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