Each moment passing by,
each significant breath...
All adding up to this.
Those thoughts we never spoke aloud,
those hugs we never gave...
The feelings that we hid,
won't find you in your grave.
In each letter that we sent,
during each casual tea party...
We never foresaw this.
Those times we kinda ignored you,
those jokes you didn't get...
We took you for granted;
guilt won't let us forget...
Each word that passes our lips, now...
Each arm that wraps around us, now...
Perhaps we can cherish it,
perhaps we can remember it...
Like we never seemed to cherish you...
Like we will always, always remember you.
Author notes
I guess this is dedicated to my great uncle Colin.
He's just been diagnosed with cancer,
and it's spread to his liver.
Basically a death sentence.
It didn't really hit me until tonight...
and then I wrote this.
It's not very good,
but I guess it expresses how I'm feeling,
and that's kinda the point of poetry.
Feel free to critique - feedback is greatly appreciated -
but please try to stay on the constructive side of criticism.
This is a contest entryy.
!!!RAINBOWS AND STUFF!!!
Options that, I think, apply to this prewrite are:
*4.Death.
*7.Other (anything goes).
A contest entry
- lotsa points!!!! (extended time! I want as many entries as possible!) by DogTagz-TheJalapeno.
800 points, ended August 9, 2008, 52 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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far reaching emotion...my favorite lines were:
"Perhaps we can cherish it,
perhaps we can remember it...
Like we never seemed to cherish you...
Like we will always, always remember you. "
Very understandable...and well done write.
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Thank you very much!!
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Awww. that was deep.... Good job. Good luck ont he contest!
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