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Behind Me

I call,
no answer.
I look,
you don't look back.
I try,
you deny.
I cry,
you smile,
Behind me.

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My prompt was avoidance. I tried my best, hope you like it.

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  • Arrianna MacEwan
    August 6, 2008

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    this is one of those poems that is perfection by simplicity. It states, effortlesly, everything that so many try to put into more words. Great write.

  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    August 6, 2008
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    I like it. I think you did a great job.


  • MoRoN
    August 6, 2008
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    this was a good write.


  • Grey Mouser
    July 14, 2008

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    Good imagery of the search for this, yet the resulting confusion when silence is your reward brings about such pain and suffering that only more tears accompany you. Nicely imaged and with deep feeling. Thanks for entering into the contest.
    Be well and be blessed,
    Mouser