The patience wears thin, unnerving for all;
an audience waits in a packed concert hall.
As the attendees, each person unique,
they're excited to see who's work to critique.
And though they see them after a time,
their first impression was the apparent first crime.
As the performers sat there, tuning their muses,
This quiet audience hid their blown fuses.
Some started to think, "My, what is that?
That girl's out of line, and that boy's like a stray cat!
This one's not placed, and that one's quite late;
in fact, this whole thing seems so second-rate!
It pains me I pushed attendance to submission...
I guess I'll just leave at the intermission."
The crowd starts to chat, hushed in their mumble:
"Is this truly their musical ensemble?"
The audience almost unruly, the rows start to thin,
people all shuffling 'til the conductor walks in.
Briefly, they stop to see his gleeful glance,
all happy and hopeful, despite circumstance.
Although their attentions would now barely linger,
all came to a focus at a lift of his finger.
Through it all, a disgruntled one had reached the door,
but a single note rang out, and his ear yearned for more.
And almost as if the guy sensed his need,
the conductor smiled - he had planted the seed.
The stir of the attendants had come to quell
as he proceeded to keep them in that wondrous spell.
The musicians continued with a dashing display,
marking their beginning with a mezzo forte.
Then when the music seemed as fast as it could go,
the conductor's wand spoke silently: "Accelerando!"
The flutes played fervently, the trumpets would blow,
and the bows shook as it began to crescendo.
A break finally came, and the wand said "Ritardando;"
The tempo then quieted to a soft adagio.
The audience had thought themselves tough-impressed;
all the old "perfect" groups were impression-obsessed.
Yet these musicians were musically bounded;
these seedy musicians' work left them dumbfounded.
The attendees were captivated by the music tender,
Their hearts' judgments were forced to surrender.
They took pride in the fact this performance was made so,
and their joy came up in its own silent crescendo.
In the final moments of the piece, they all played hard;
the music exploded in dramatic form - their trump card.
As the conductor closed the final note, he pridefully stared
at his students, then the audience to see how they fared.
The man at the door now stood there in awe,
He was downright shocked - he couldn't believe what he saw.
He then shouted out to all, their mended hearts all now one,
"Embrace this masterful work! Applaud, everyone!"
The performers stood to endless applause;
smiles unbounded, the claps without pause.
Thousands are thrilled, and with the audience's glee,
The Orchestral Underdogs Changed History!
Author notes
The orchestral underdog wins the day! Yay! ^.^
A list of the musical terms I used:
Conductor / Musicians
Mezzo Forte
Accelerando
Crescendo
Ritardando
Adagio
Form
Note
Orchestra (orchestral)
Hope you all enjoy!
--Flare the Arcphoenix 
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So beautifully written; as a musician I absolutely loved this, and it gave me a good chuckle, as well as making some forgotten memories rise to the fore, LOL!
Some lines didn't quite sync, with the lengths being uneven but on the whole it was very well written, and I did enjoy the way you intertwined the musical terms - very well done. Thanks for entering -
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Thanks for reading and enjoying. ^_^ As far as the lines go, sometimes it's difficult to trim them down to the right size without losing meaning...rhyming poems have that problem a lot more than free-written poems do.
In fact, reading back over it now, I see a line I can fix: the impression-obsessed line. I'll change it now. ^_^ I see some other cosmetic issues with some of the words as well, so I'll fix them too.
Comment much appreciated! Thanks for taking the time. ^.^
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heheheheheh I have read this before I believe but I never commented
eek! so now I shall.
AS a musician myself I found this very humourous.
Some lines were a bit long but we needn't get into that. IT was so bouncy and free and the rhymes were fantastic. My brain now has an urge to rhyme again but I shall not let it. These sentences are craving rythm and rhyme so I must stop here before I succumb to it.
RHYMES ARE CONTAGIOUS
loved it
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Well, sorry my comment took so long.
However, I wanted to comment all of the entires are once. Okay, so this was amazing. It flowed well and told quite the interesting story. Nice work. 
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I understand - that's what I figured. ^.^
Thanks!
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No problem.
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Haha! THIS ROCKS!!!
I love how you took a vocab list and turned it into an entire story (in perfect poetic form, not to mention)!
You are just too good!!!!
I was impressed with your knowledge of and it seemed, fascination with, the words.
Great job and good luck in the contest, my friend!
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I guess it didn't help my fascination that I'm taking a music appreciation course currently. XD
Thank you!
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