I dozed off for just
a moment, rested my eyes
begging for closure.
Never saw the guy walk in,
but watched him stroll out.
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True story.
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heart wrenching
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You Leave Me Speechless
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Wow
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Great piece, I like the last two lines.
"Never saw the guy walk in,
but watched him stroll out."
It shows what he missed without being direct. -
How illuminating this is but it contains no referenec to Jesus, which I find strange. He (Jesus) should be everywhere in us.
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:))))
well written and effective
I liked when you stated
never saw the guy walk in but watched him stroll out!
niceeeeeeeeeeeee
juliet
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I like it.
Clear and simply stated, but leaves a mysterious feeling.
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Ha! Pithy. I do like this brief tale of work doldrums. We all do so get to the point of fatigue sometimes and then... ~ Joyce
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Nice. I like this. It's clear, concise, and effectual. You do brevity really well; I've noticed. And, work stories are always interesting
G'luck in the contest!
~Pt
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oh dear, a burglary or just missing out on a cute one! lol Great job here. Love, C
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what a wonderful depiction of a moment.
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