Turning away from
summers scorching flames,
I sidestep reality.
Blazing sunsets
became snows crunch underfoot,
dodging icy veins
of grief.
Author notes
prompt; avoidance
20 words
A contest entry
- prompt inspired; 20 words, 10 entries by Grey Mouser.
475 points, ended July 14, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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ah, gried can chase us through the years if it wishes to, to avoid its power just delays, a good poem.
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Heat of passions rise and burn, leaving a cold brittle shell when passed and thoughts drip frozen from the mind. Wonderfully descriptive and creative, many thanks for entering into the contest.
Be well and be blessed,
Mouser -
icy veins of grief... now that is deep! When you are sad... it sure does feel like we have ice running through the veins. Well done. Juls
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I like the reality of this piece. An excellent take on the prompt. So much imagery and descriptive expression is settling in thought as i ponder over your words.Brilliant. Good luck.
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yay!
I really really enjoyed this write, the imagery was like a slap in the face, beautiful...very poignant...I totally think I spelled that wrong either way, sweet deal... -
clever.. a journey in 20 words xx good luck
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Wow.. a lot of depth in here hun and I think it could relate to many different situations! I'm trying to sidestep reality myself! lol
Wonderful 20 creative words!
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