Conducted to terminal amenities
what you want from me is preposterous
I will never verve you to twinge my heart-
at least not intentionally.
The abhor gained against you
limits me to usurp this obscenity
of what you conjure a precious appreciation;
Now converted into a magical devastation-
(brought by your dark whispers)
Bedraggled; you forfeit this devious game-
I am torn and circumscribed by synthetic accidents
also scarced by humble facts and periods;
I stumble and fall.
You will not convey me to dawdle my life-
All the pain inside of you will only strife;
Amok and in vacant absolution,
you will not conduct me to murderous beliefs-
The anthracite heart of yours
allows me to release some serenity
in what you conjure a precious attraction;
Now converted into a repressive retraction-
(brought down by my dark whispers)
~♥~
Author notes
Tried my best
XXVampireeyesXX
Title: Dark Whispers
(P.S. the photos an extra just kinda fitted the poem hope you dont mind)
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A contest entry
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700 points, ended July 22, 2008, 21 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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this is brilliant, mega tired so my comment sucks, but this is amazing
♥
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i really enjoyed the vivid imagery in this poem! well done! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox
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Fantastic word usage, penning such a remarkable poem that has such an amazing personality (and quite a strong one at that)
This was really good
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This is incredible my dear!!! Such wonderful verbiage and great depth of imagery to outline the pained thoughts within. Loved these lines:
"Conducted to terminal amenities
what you want from me is preposterous
I will never verve you to twinge my heart-
at least not intentionally."
What an introduction! This piece is very deep, and well conveyed. Something to make a few think a bit, more than the average piece of brokenness. Nicely done!
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'I will never verve you to twinge my heart-'
interesting, i really like that line. your phrasing and tone is unique. I like that.
'The anthracite heart of yours'
lovely bit of poetry.
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Very well written poem, my daughter...you make daddy proud... ...
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Woah, pretty awesome here! Fantastic imagery, beautiful flow. It deserved the gold.
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Wonderful thought for this picture
prompt and congratulations on your
gold trophy! Keep up the great work
here and thanks a lot for sharing it!
Jeremy0826 -
hhmmm..
I just woke, and read this first thing. To be honest, I see it is a good write, but I am not awake enough to understand all that it is saying. I am also going to need a dictionary, as I am not sure of the meaning of some of the words you used, as you used them here.
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thanks for entering and sorry it took so long to read and comment
this is a very nice poem, great use of vocabulary, good job here -
Nicely done dear cousin. I read it twice. I enjoyed it. The gold trophy was well deserved. Great job.
Mike.
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Don't mind at all, it's a beautiful piece, very expressive and raw. Love the emotion conveyed and the language you use throughout. Makes me really get into it.
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Wow...you have such an amazing verbiage on this piece which definitely helps convey the complexity of it all. "Twinge my heart," I love this phrase, very well expressed. The use of the title within the poem is absolutely brilliant, only twice and each times it gave such a profound meaning to that stanza... it all tied up in the end. Great piece Twinnie!
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